| "Restless Sleep" Reviews/Comments [ 32 ] |
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Reviewed By: InuyashaKagome4lyfe [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2009 20:51 CDT
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-_- I forgot. MediaMiner doesn't space the stuff you want. Just write the reply on the next line. XD
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Reviewed By: InuyashaKagome4lyfe [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2009 20:50 CDT
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Okay, I absolutely LOVED the story. There was just one problem. When two or more characters are talking to each other, make sure to always start another sentence with the second person talking. For ex: "Inuyasha," Miroku asked, "What are you doing today?" "I don't know. Maybe go to the skating rink." Inuyasha replied with a bored tone and a wave of his hand. And when Inuyasha talks to his inner beast, the same rule applies. But other than that, your story is a 10/10.
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Reviewed By: cynsue [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2008 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellant lemon.
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2008 19:12 CDT
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this was such a good story.
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Reviewed By: pinkmoonusagi513 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2007 22:34 CDT
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I agree with Neko777. It could have been better. You have a wonderful concept going here and it is a great first fic! I really look forward to your growth as a writer and future fics!
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Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2007 19:57 CDT
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Thanks fo the update. Need more please. Keep up the wonderful work.
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Reviewed By: hopelessromantic_16 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2007 18:46 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow i would never believe koga would do something like that please update sonn
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Title: Neko777
Reviewed By: Neko777 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2007 16:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like your story, but your lemon could have been sooooooo much better. Im not trying to flame, just giveing helpful advice. ^_^
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Title: TERRIFIC
Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2007 20:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful chapter. Keeps getting better every time.... please update soon.
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Reviewed By: hopelessromantic_16 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2007 18:40 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved this chapter can't wait until u update
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2007 14:05 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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interesting story... really like it so far.. update soon... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: Lucifer_Spades [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2007 10:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I kinda liked it at first but it's getting a bit redundant and the lemons are jerky and not very exciting. I'll keep reading in hopes that the potential I saw at first will fulfill it's self but my hopes are begining wane.
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Reviewed By: Inuluver66613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2007 22:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am SO happy you put the spaces between the paragraphs, i love the story, it is new, so i have to freak out now.......YES!!!!! HELL YEAH! THE WITCH IT DEAD! which old witch, Kikyou, the kinky ho! hahaha! finally! you don't know how long i have waited for this day! YAY! omfg! YESSSSSSSSSSSSSS! WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!11 ....... sorry, i'm good now, i do have one problem, the entries aren't long enough! So ummm..... maybe the next ones while be longer, please! anyways, awesome! Inuyasha and Kagome are together and Kikyou is dead so if you don't make them longer i wouldn't mind to much! Thank you! you rock!
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Reviewed By: GaaraLuva [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2007 16:06 CDT
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That was soooooooo good! no time to rate. Must go read more. You've given me some good ideas already, and I've only read one chapter!
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Reviewed By: TShrieken [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2007 15:07 CDT
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Not bad on the lemon. You could have used a bit more indirect nounage right at first, to kinda ease the transition between normal story and lemon. Oh, and I've always imagined Inuyasha's and Kagome's first time together with Inu taking her doggie style. I mean, it makes more sense that way. He is part DOG demon, after all.
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