| "The Long Awaited Destiny" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Reviewed By: Lady wolf rider of the forest On: August 10, 2007 23:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
you are going to quickly and the characters are very out of character. Also what do you mean giving herself to him completly your context makes no sence.slow down and add detail it is a great plot it just needs a little TLC
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Reviewed By: InuKiKei [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2007 05:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it could be a lot better if you slowed the story down and added more detail, also the characters are behaving VERY out of character, particularly InuYasha.
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Reviewed By: Porcelain_Baby_Doll09 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2007 12:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very very very wonderful...please write more soon!
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