Title: Prologue
Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2007 18:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
I didn't bother reading all the description, but it's not like I have all the time in the world. Also, you might like to reconsider the following, "step daughter, and with the crisis of her eldest birth daughter had been missing for over a week." Shouldn't "step daughter" have a hyphen, and you might like to insert a "who" in that sentence or something. You also simply wrote "stepdaughter" later on. Anyway, I don't mind about there not being Kagome or Inuyasha there yet as it was entertaining enough, but what I would like to see, is more - looking forward to it. Mata ne!
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