| "If He Only Knew" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Short Rochester [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2002 21:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm really sorry. I've had and still have a lot on my mind. Just today, my best friend, Katey, got taken from her house by a social worker person. I'm bawling my eyes out! Well, on the inside, anyway. I also have a lot of fics as Short rochester. c ya!
lil |
Reviewed By: Pan Brief On: July 17, 2002 21:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
G/M! G/M! G/M! G/M! Sorry about that, but G/M rule! This is great^_^
Yours truly,
Pan Brief |
Reviewed By: Storm_410 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2002 00:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Neat story. The plot is different. Many fics have Marron drooling over Trunks. It's nice to see a change. I liked it very much, but had a hard time figuring out who was saying what. It may just be my computer but your story comes out like one huge pharagraph when I read it. If its not my computer screan then I would suggest you try and fix that. I've noticed the same thing for all your stories. If you put it into different pharagraphs (a new one every time a different charactor speaks) it would make your story much more fun to read. Hope you post the next xhapter soon. I want to read what happens! |
Reviewed By: Burned Vamp On: June 23, 2002 03:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! This is pretty good! Not hard or angsty, very light read, and very enjoyable! I hope you post the next chapter very soon! |
