| "Things Gone Wrong" Reviews/Comments [ 33 ] |
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2007 19:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good start, eager to read more.
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Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2007 18:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your story thus far... the premise of it. It'll be interesting on where you take the characters. Update when ya can! ;)
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Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2007 15:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
It looks like a set up for an interesting story. From here there are a lot of possibilities on where you could take it and I would like to see what you have in mind. The only think that bothers me so far (it really is kind of silly) is spelling school as "skool" when Inuyasha is pronouncing it. There is no way for him to pronounce it in such a way that would indicate this misspelling. I know it is supposed to indicate his ignorance of such things, but it really just rubs me the wrong way... No big deal though... do what you will.
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