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Reviewed By: Trelweny Rosephoenixwolf [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2009 17:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting & unique story. Not happy about the event that caused Tenmei's turn... but I see how it was plot-required for his revelation & transformation. Interesting spin, getting Kurama & Shizuza (sp -darn, without being able to see the chapter I can't remember the spelling *pouts*) together. Really cute pairing I wasn't expecting & hadn't really thought about before -plus I loved the way of getting her to go cold turkey on cigs. lol Almost not much of a crossover though. There wasn't much interaction between the sisters and reallly it was odd seeing InuYasha so quiet was really, really, really weird. I understand some change, or in certain circumstances being more intelligent and stealthy... but without some of the brashness & mouthy-ness it really doesn't feel like InuYasha at all. But back on Kagome --we didn't even SEE her weapon. Actually... I think the ball was dropped on the importance of their weapons after Akayo had her sword. BIg Bad Guy didn't even make a face seeing the sword that had frightened him enter his body. *frowns lightly* Yeah... looking back on it more should've happened concerning their weapons after the importance placed on them. I do want to thank you for giving Kazuma some credit. ^_^ Yes... he can be a big dufus and center of comic relief, but he's NOT completely stupid and does have his moments. Those few times he made an impressionable appearance in your story showed that & I was softly impressed. Other than InuYasha I feel the characters were pretty well kept in character -or at least believable. ^_^ Not TOO many errors, which was really nice to see. Still a bunch though -just relatively easy to overlook and pretty well dispersed throughout such a long piece. it was gripping... but I'm not sure I'd want to re-read it. *ponders* Not sure why exactly. Could be just me. *wry grin* Thank you for writing.
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2009 06:33 CST
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this was a good story
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Reviewed By: Alena [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2008 23:08 CDT
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Ok ... so OOPS! i had my computer on and my friends happened to delete an unfriendly review. Which i dont think is a good thing. From what i can get out of them it said something along the lines of my story sucks and makes no sense. Altho i would prefer constructive criticism I dont like to erase anyones opinion. So whoever you are I apologize. I also apologize for the fact that you hate my story. I guess its not for everyone. Thanks!
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Reviewed By: KaosuMusouka [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2008 23:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Domo Domo Domo Arigatou! I'm glad that my words mean such to you, And you did them even more justice! Another beautiful chapter, as expected. I am sorry for the delay in this comment though, as you posted this chapter a month ago. But I still wait for the next update! Take your time, creativity can't be rushed. --Domo, Fushigi
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Reviewed By: KaosuMusouka [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2008 03:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm speechless...I didn't realize I was holding my breath for most of the last few chapters. This is beautifully written, it pulls and tears at my heart-strings as I laugh at a stray comment from Yuusuke or the like. I commend you so very much, and I can't wait for more. You have my rapt attention with every word you write. I feel Hiei's anger as if it were my own, I feel Ayako's anguish in my heart. This is what reading and writing is about. You are a wonderful authoress. I hope to see more. ~Domo, Fushigi
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2008 01:03 CDT
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I love it....XD....They are...ALMOST picking up where they left off in their relationship....Kurama's going to be a daddy soon to that is so cute...XD....the courting mark isn't the same a mateing mark...will it be strong enough to snap her out of her mind control state when it happenes?....I can only hope I guess....sigh*.....I thankyou for updateding and please continue to do so.....Nyuka
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2008 21:47 CDT
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Thats soooooooooooo sweet....but yet....soooooooooooooo sad...T-T....I don't know how to feel right now...the Stuped Hiei is finaly back but Ayako could be mind controled at any moment.....Ayako Hates Hiei but still loves him...Hiei never stoped love her but hates him self for leaveing her...its like a soap opera....hehe.....You'll make everything better though won't you ....I hope so...XD
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Title: UMMM YEAH
Reviewed By: Mimi-Chan On: January 16, 2008 23:02 CST
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ok this story makes no sense i mean you have a crossover and you really dont talk about any other characters except for Hiei and whatever her name is. I mean you dont even talk about her relationship with Kagome at all. Or even what happened with Naraku and the rest of the Shard hunters. All in all i say that you just wanted to write yourself into a story and in love with a character. Pretty pathetic if you ask me. You got to learn that this is a ANIME not real life so get with it make good fics and get real.
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2008 19:59 CST
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Stuped Hiei something like that could cost him the girl what is he thinking....dang he can still have honor just not to his or her expense....dang it this is grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr............that dork of a prince just had to show updid he.......and how could they tell those stuped things wheren't forged by the bad guy so they can get a hold of them like befor.............graaaaaaaaaaaa dang it dang it dang it.....................whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy.......aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.................*huff* *huff* *huff*.......*sigh*........stuped warped honor of stuped fire ice demons............and even if that was a real document what if that guy isn't who he says he is, this is just too stuped for my likeing...........Hay maybe Kagome can go to the past and get her parents never to sigh such a thing ........ya that would be good..........might change history abit though.....hmmmmmmmmm well this stinks.........I'll just see how your going to fix this in the next chapter.........sigh....................Nyuka..................Meow.
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2007 19:45 CST
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CCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCCLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLlllIIIIIII IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFYYYYYYYYYYYY YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY....CLIFFY, CLIFFY, CLIFFY, CLIFFY..............WHY DO YOU DO THIS WHY MUST YOU PROLONG HIEI'S BLOOD FEST....WHY, WHY, WHY, WHY, WHY....*POUT*....no fare you did it on purpouse........*Pout*.......grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr.....I'm not get any where with his am just update soon will ya please ./O.O\.
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2007 12:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL I LOVE THIS PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2007 00:35 CST
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Update upadate update update update update update..................aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh that was not a nice cliff nofare dang it.....*pout*..............come update realy realy soon......like tomarrow.............please ...................*puppy dog pout*.....................I'll be your best friend.....heh........I sound so childish...oh-well update update update update......please........................................Nyuka
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2007 23:35 CST
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I want to read more can and you right more so I can read it realy soon please please please.......I'll be good....hehe...XD....love this fic..hehe...........Nyuka
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2007 23:34 CST
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OOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooohhhhhhhh......>..
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Reviewed By: Nyuka [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2007 02:05 CST
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Dang it I was realy getting in to that and ya had to go and stop it (well ok you didn't nessarily stop writing I just didn't catch it after you had writen more) You better not stop writing I'm like freaking out here all along knowing the truth quietly yelling at them for going in to the mouth of the dragon (Oxymoron....hehe quietly yelling....hehe) but on a serious note this looks bad and you need to update before this three day weekend is up....I need to know dang it......so update soon.........Nyuka...........P.S. I am sorry for any how rash my may or may not sound cause I don't deam my self responsible for a cliffy that practicly strangles the life out of my awaitingly curious fill brain of crazyness.....so ya please don't blame me.
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