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| "Forbidden Fruit" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2007 09:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
This was beautiful. I don't care how out of charater they are. Change nothing! Anyone that tells you to alter the characters and/or plot is insane and should be ignored. Inuyasha's monolouge was deep, sweet, and charming. (Who wouldn't want to be stalked by him!) I can't imagine how long it must have taken to tweak it to your liking. It was perfect. Now let's not sell Kagome short. Her POV was nice too. Her's just isn't as deep as his was. But we have to get through the "foundation" of the plot before we can get to the "good stuff". As she grows and the story progresses her POV will be just as deep as his (even if his will always be deeper because he has studied her longer). I think your casting was a bit of a suprise to me. It seems like you took a lot of time to think about the roles. Everyone seems to be cast the role they have for a higher purpose. And I can't thank you enough for having a reasonable situation to have Koga like Kagome and not have him be too overbearing (of course he will explode later but it will be approperiate). Usually people screw it up and it makes me cry because Koga's potential is wasted into making him a catalyst for Inuyasha. Your writing style is indescribable. I love it and I can't explain why. The details...the attention you give to the small things make the big things shine even more. I see where you have planted the seeds for many little subplots. (Or maybe they are part of the big plot?) Makes me wonder if you will have time to nurture them all but I have confidence in you. I know you can juggle them all and still balance the story. It's so hard to write in the first person correctly. I commend you on doing so. Doing it correctly with style takes work and much effort. I want to go on and on about Kagome and Inuyasha's characters but I don't have enough space for that. But I do love what you have done with them. I'm eager to see what you do with them. The only vampire version of Inuyasha I have ever loved was Bloodlust by angelbabe17. I feared it would be the only one too. You have renewed my hopes and banished my fears. Finding a good vampire story is rare. I'm thankful to have found this hidden treasure. Sadly I see this story will be slow going. You can't rush perfection I suppose. So I won't tell you to hurry and update. I will try to remain paticent between posts. Sorry about not being a grammar goddess. I KNOW there are mistakes in here. Before I forget, I know Inuyasha said he was going to up the stakes...did he leave the curtain open on purpose? Is he playing around im her mind "helping" those dreams along? And I'm guessing he can stand sunlight as long as it isn't bright daylight? (I decided to transfer my review since the story was moved also. Hope you don't mind. I didn't change anything...but I want to...)
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