| "On a Thin Line" Reviews/Comments [ 17 ] |
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Reviewed By: barbara On: August 24, 2002 15:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is really strange. On the Prologue you fall in love with it, then it wierds you out in the next chapter and you just never know what to expect. Keeps you on your toes for sure. One of those fics you HAVE to read more of, because of its inexplicable allure. |
Reviewed By: Amaris [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2002 23:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue, it's very intriguing (sorry my grammer and spelling is only a three) i can't wait for the next chapter. |
Reviewed By: Masamune On: July 17, 2002 17:09 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is great! that little girl is awesome!!!! she's so charismatic it's scary! yay!
so what happens to vegeta? does the freaky but cute girl let him go or what? update soon so i can find out! |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2002 10:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
How cute. I never knew Veggie hjad a weakness for puppy dog eyes. I'll have to try them on him once he calms down. *points to the closet* It was rather difficult but Kakarott helped me get Veggie into a ki resistant rope, and now he's sitting in the closet until he calms down.... which just might be awhile. He was quite... pertubed. *chuckles*
Goku: *hands ssjprincess a drink and gives a huge grin* So, I am helping her with this review.
ssjprincess: *eyes Kakarott up and down then grins mischieveously* Yeah, he's helping me. *not so accidently spills her drink* Oh no! I seem to have spilled my drink. I should clean that up, but *rubs her back* My back hurts so. *pouts*
Goku: *smiles* No problem, I'll clean it up for you. *bends over and cleans up the mess*
ssjprincess: *sits back and sighs, then winks at you* I loved the chapter. Vegeta's head was turned by no other than Bulma Briefs. :) Hurry up with the next chapter. While I'm waiting for the next chapter, I'll just be sitting here enjoying the view. *chuckles* ;) |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2002 10:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
ssjprincess: *looks at Vegeta and bursts out laughing*
Vegeta: I find nothing funny here!
ssjprincess: *tries to stop her laughing* You're right... Fluffy. *bursts out laughing again*
Vegeta: *crosses his arms and scowls* I'm going to blast someone yet.
ssjprincess: *chuckles* Anyhow, great chapter. Very funny. I liked the part where Veggie was telling her of how he was going to torture her and she replied with, 'When do we start?'. :)
Vegeta: *grumbles* How about right now, Onna.
ssjprincess: O.O!!
Vegeta: O.o I'm almost afraid to ask, but What?
ssjprincess: *points and falls over laughing*
Vegeta: *narrows his eyes at the suspicious content and reads* Oh.... Kami.... no....
ssjprincess: *barely contained laughter* I can see you now, Veg. You'd be the Belle of the ball.
Vegeta: *shakes his head and runs his hand slowly over his face*
ssjprincess: You'd be beautiful, Vegeta. *giggling* Absolutely stunning.
Vegeta: *growls* That's it! *powers up, then looks at ssjprincess and Kat* Which of you wants blasted first?!
ssjprincess: *squeals, points at Kat, then runs* :P lol
Anyway, great chapter, I loved it... so on to the next. :) |
Reviewed By: ssjprincess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2002 09:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
Interesting prologue.
Vegeta: I agree. *smirks* I'm a ruthless killer. You've got to love it.
ssjprincess: O.o Ahhh... yeeaahh. Anyway, 'Can I adopt him?', how funny. :) I'm curious as to where this fic will go, so I guess I'll have to bend to my curiosity and go to the next chapter. :) |
Reviewed By: Lonely Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2002 12:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
Yay now I definitely know that is Bulma!!! I hope this is a B/V! |
Reviewed By: Sawnya [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2002 09:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very funny! I read and reviewed this at ff.net, but I don't know if you ever saw the review, so I am reviewing here. This is very original, and I thought the part of Vegeta being dressed in drag was funny! I can SEE Vegeta dressed as a girl; isn't that scary? Anyway, good job and continue! |
Reviewed By: Shade On: June 30, 2002 16:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm confused a bit on how she managed to get Vegeta, and how she's staying alive. But that
is what gives it a holy crap a can't breath because I'm laughing to hard kinda feel to it.
Great job I want to see where your going with this. |
Reviewed By: Jeril Dragonsoul On: June 29, 2002 13:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fanfic!! Are you going to post it on ff.n? It's awesome!! "Can I adopt him?" *lol* And then she made him play dress-up!! Poor Veggie!!
That song you had on the 1st chap was one I've been listening to for the past couple days! o.0
Well, gotta jet! Ja ne!
*Jeril Dragonsoul |
Reviewed By: Lonely Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2002 11:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Shit that is funny!!!! Is the little girl going to turn out to be Bulma even though she has blue eyes? Is this a B/V? I hope it is. Please update soon! |
Reviewed By: mizu megami [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2002 14:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
*LMAO*i think im going to die laughing. *SLMAO* and the "can i adopt him?" was priceless. and DAMN! i feel the utmost extreame pity for Veggie. he looks like a chick...well it puts a new meaning on 'Veggie-chan'*falls off chair laughing* OW!
*rubbing head* ok bai bai,
:)mizu:P |
Reviewed By: Sam On: June 28, 2002 14:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think your fic is very funny. And I just love how you made the girl so happy and able to get anything she wants. But I was wondering if the girl is suppose to be Bulma or some other created charcter? Well I love yourfic, please update soon. |
Reviewed By: The Author On: June 28, 2002 13:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
Why would I rate my own Fic? I'm just here to say that the more reviews I get, the more likely I am to update this story, that's how I work. I'm used to getting at least five reviews on a story...although i'm sad to admit that i have stories with only one review on them...on FF.N...but that's because I just wanted one person's opinion on some of them. I got it, I'm very happy. |
Reviewed By: cosmoskat [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2002 03:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooo, that's classic: "Can I adopt him?" *lol* You gotta love that, I sure do. ^_^ So, how did Vegeta manage to get himself caught, and why is Piccolo the prison guard person, err namek? Please continue this, it's very cute - even Vegeta, who is a mass murderer! Eh heh heh. O_o;;
-cosmoskat =^.~= |
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