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Title: my silly review
Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2008 10:35 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sexy like weed from south of the boarder!
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Reviewed By: akarii On: December 29, 2007 07:38 CST
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via 'inuerotica' at LiveJournal Delicious lemon; I very much enjoyed reading this! I also adored the light-hearted humor you scattered all over the plot. Good stuff!
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Reviewed By: CMK2CMM [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2007 20:46 CST
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I really enjoyed this. The teasing, dragging it out til the end only made it better when you got to the end. Very well written
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Reviewed By: vikikibouki@hotmail.com On: November 19, 2007 22:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Fantastic song-fic! Yep, I'm from that era. Just happens to be one of my FAVORITE songs, too. 'I want you to want me' 'I need you to need me' 'I'd love you to love me' 'I'm beggin' you to beg me' 'Ohh, didn't I, didn't I, didn't I hear ya cryin' 'Didn't I, didn't I, didn't I hear ya cryin' And so forth. This story follows it to a tee, might I add. Love it. I'd rate it 100% if I could. Good work, little one! Nicely done!
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Reviewed By: AmberEyez [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2007 09:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This made my morning! Finally - a well-written, fun, and yummy bit of lemon. And yes, you ARE a tease. Just the way we all like it.
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Reviewed By: a-apple [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2007 12:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good job
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Reviewed By: 45cats [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 12:03 CST
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Damn girl; nice job. I know I should be focused on the lemon but getting there is half the fun, particularly when the writing is witty. I was going to quote but there were too many from which to choose. I did giggle at the Miroku losing money to Shippo banter. XD I'm one of those that believes sex is better if you can laugh, although many men find that alarming. meh. I enjoyed reading this and it's just wonderful.
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Title: Please write more stories
Reviewed By: Delan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 11:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say, this has been one of the better stories I've read in a while. But it made me sad that it was only 4 chapters. :'( Please write more stories!
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 02:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i find it hard to believe that this is your first story. you did a wonderful job. i hope you continue. it is so hard to start reading a story, only to find that spelling or word use make it impossible to continue. when i find one like this, i'm overjoyed. it was so much fun to be able to read the story and not have to constantly rewrite it in my mind, so that it made sense. thank you for a complete, polished effort.
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Title: Aspirat primo Fortuna labori
Reviewed By: Licentia poetica [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 01:37 CDT
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That translates to "Fortune smiles upon (y)our first effort." (Virgil) Good job for a first time fanfic! I enjoyed the last two chapters the most; you abandoned the narrator's voice and left most of the passive tense behind. Much, MUCH better than my first effort, though!
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Title: Nice interpretation of the song's lines!
Reviewed By: Lady Athenis On: November 03, 2007 22:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My reason behind the rating? How about... umm, I'm not too picky when it comes to erotica? Naw, too corny... It was VERY tasty! Stirred the imagination very well. I read what piques my interests, and being that I'm a 1st timer too (gasp!), I read other fics to "get a feel" (no pun intended) for what gets the hits. Plus, it keeps The Hentai Fae Muse(tm) content! When he's happy, it's all good! Good job! ^O.~^
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Title: Looking forward to more
Reviewed By: JMaxwell [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2007 17:06 CDT
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For your first time out of the gate, this is pretty good stuff. Feni knows her stuff, and it's awesome that you got her to help you out. I found it to be a little underwritten, and that can be taken as a perverse compliment, since I'm basically asking you to write more. If the objective of your story was to be a "realistic way they resolve their relationship in a lemony manner" tale, I thought they proceeded through their hangups very quickly, and Kagome had a reaction to first-time sex that most women would probably dream about. If the objective was just to be a fun, less-plot-driven "Inuyasha and Kagome get it on" fic, then the pacing and Kagome overcoming her pain that fast isn't really a problem (it's your fantasy), and I think you did quite well. Thumbs up. As a personal pet peeve, I think dropping random Japanese words like koibito or kawaii or ai shiteru (not all of which you had in there, I'm just tossing out examples) is kind of distracting. I'm more comfortable when something in English stays in English, with the exception of the terms that nobody translates from the manga, like Tessaiga or Kongousoha. Your writing was smooth. Grammar was certainly not distracting. It was quite respectable, and I hope to read more from you. Cheers!
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Reviewed By: LadyCash [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2007 11:20 CDT
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Very nice, and fun, too! That's a great combo, hot and funny. You nailed it, pun intended!
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Reviewed By: Patchcat (NSI) On: November 03, 2007 10:33 CDT
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That was very well done. It's not often we get to see present tense written so well, but you've done just that. I look forward to more from you.
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Reviewed By: Raeko [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2007 23:21 CDT
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Wow! If that was your first go at fanfiction, it was pretty darned impressive. Thanks for sharing it with us!
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