Title: Some Writting Advice.
Reviewed By: LestatsDarkAngel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 13:48 CST
Comment/Review:
First off i'm not sure if your aware of this or not but your prolg. and first beginning chapter are both the same. Second You only have a paragraph for a chapter. If you are truly serious about creating this fanfic, then you need to write more out. At least 10 to 13 pages on Microsoft word will do. Also more detail in your stroy would do wonders. You never said what happened in the battle, how she died, who killed Naraku, if any of the others died as well or anything. Not even what she was wearing or how she looked. like for example 'Her brused at battered body sighed as she lay on the confortable grass beneath her. This was the end. The vile hanyou was finnaly anilated as she could now say she protected her friends. A weak smiled played across her face as she looked at all the tearful faces around her. Yet his demise came at a price...the price of her life.' something like that ya know? BUT a long longer and more filled out lol. Also the more detail and how you go along with it could also get you more reviews. Also if you new at this then the best thing to do is get a beta. In case you don't know a Beta is a person who helps colaborate with your story and gives you aadvice on what to do and what not and also for the bigger part, if your having problems writting your story, they go over it and make the needed changes to go and make your story sound better. If your interested in doing this i'd be happy to help if you'd like. Because you summary of this story sounds extreamly good and I would l ove to see this story at it's full potental. If ur interestedin my offer then you can check outmy stories if you want. Hope you take this to heart and know that i'm not trying to put your writting down, but mearly offer helpful sugestions.
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