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Title: wheeeeeeee
Reviewed By: deep v {DNAngel rox my soxs! XD} On: November 30, 2007 00:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey soph its stuff so i really enjoyed reading this! it was nice that u didnt make it hard for people not quite up- to -date on inuyasha to understand. [ahem...me] so anyway, nice charactor details and i saw some good similies/mets. n there. umm i kinda hope she deosnt go insane tho- that would be kinda depressing. maybe some more stuff about how she came to love him. also theres a bit of an issue with an over use of pronouns. make it more clear who the "she"'s are. cause soemtimes it was like-"wait, is 'she' kagome or kiyoko? AUGH!"so good work- keep it up! ily stuffins xoxo
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Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: Iceberg60 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2007 19:05 CST
Comment/Review:
I like it ^_^ And i can't say i'm the greatest writer in the world either ofcourse, but i like where the plot is headed, and I want to see what happens with Inu. That little voice though doesn't sound like Kagome at all though...it may be some inner voice, but a good sub-plot thingy like unistar says is that it could naraku trying to manipulate her-- just random ideas of course. ^_^ Anyways, keep up with the writing! Good job!!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 29, 2007 03:02 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
great update... kagome seems to be loosing it... she isn't being calm... she's too emotional right now... something needs to be done... will someone help her... maybe she needs to get away... with the way kagome is now... naraku will be able to control her easily... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2007 03:42 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
nice update... seems that kagome is still troubled... she's having nightmares now... she's to worked up on thinking about inuyasha & kikyo that's why... hope she'll be able to relax a bit... as for inuyasha still undecided of course... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2007 22:10 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
nice update... really sad for kagome... seems that she's so down right now... she needs something or someone to remedy her situation... maybe get her mind off of inuyasha & kikyo... hope that everything works out for kagome in the end... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2007 01:36 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
interesting story... hope kagome will be strong-willed in this one... seems like she'll need to be... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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