Title: Great Idea, Decent Execution
Reviewed By: EmikoChan On: April 04, 2009 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
The concept is sweet and loving, and you really grasp Zelda's pain and Link's silence speaking volumes. However, the sex scene needs a little... improvement. It's obvious that the author does not have much 'first hand' experience with such matters, as the sequence events seems to be more based on hear-say than actual truth to sexual intercourse. Suggestions: Prolonged foreplay, more emotional detail to describe physical longing and need. The portrayal of Zelda is fantastic, however, and I really enjoyed the characterization of her.
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