| "Drawn to the Rhythm (The Easiest Thing )" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Title: ldymoon(nsi)
Reviewed By: ldymoon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2008 01:55 CST
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ok, now you know you really have to update! lol. that was an evil evil evil and dare i say it one more time evil!!! cliff hanger of an ending to that chapter and it's now November & it's not updated. EVIL!!! lol. great story btw. looking forward to the next update ps. right now you can call this story bouncing bunnies and i'd still come back to read it. lol.
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Title: ldymoon(nsi)
Reviewed By: ldymoon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2008 00:18 CDT
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I like reading this story so far, tho, i keep thinking about poor ichigo, i know he's depressed somewhere trying to kill himself for what had happened. i hope that Orihime forgives him, since, it really wasn't him that did it, but his hollow side. he was tortured and the whole 9 yards. however, i'm glad there not together i'm not a fan of that pairing, i don't hate it, i just don't see it. but i love this pairing and i love how ishida has a new family...well, i just love this story so i'll keep reading and you keep writing k.
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Title: Author's Notes
Reviewed By: saseko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2008 21:45 CDT
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I apologize for the posting delay. New job.. RL very busy but I feel guilty as hell to not spending more time on this lately. Anyway, thank you VERY much to those who have read through this far. And I am sorry I haven't replied to my feedback lately... Gomen.. but please know that it's actually because of Bastion, cancerchick, and a few readers from FanFiction.net that made me finally finish thisch and post it. I don't think ppl understand how much the feedback helps to motivate... Best Bastion Ever.. still!
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Title: GOTTA LOVE IT
Reviewed By: cancerchick16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2008 18:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like the diffrent theories propossed and how u tied the cracters together biologically. get more about characters we didn't know about. one question where i chad and when and how ichigo comingback to the story. would love to know.
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2008 14:42 CDT
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I love some of the theories you have proposed about the Quincy and wrapping everything together like this. Shiori is an awesome original character and she compliments the rest of the cast well. Also your beta seems to have done a good job and I apologize if I haven't been able to help you out as much as I'd like to, but it looks like you're doing great. Look forward to more.
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Reviewed By: ninjaintheshadow [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2008 22:06 CDT
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awsome story so far what happen to ichigo and is hime dreaming this but still in los noches cant stand the hime and ishida hook up cant wait for more
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Reviewed By: nonameonpurpose...lol! On: March 08, 2008 02:59 CST
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hmm...lucky indeed.-_-
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Reviewed By: nonameonpurpose On: February 28, 2008 04:12 CST
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first:bout the grammar...i remember janina when starting...lol...and second:bout the rules thingie, well ive seen(...uh, i mean read) some great writers who did those kind of things...i dunno, theyre wrong then? -_-a
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Title: Author's Notes
Reviewed By: saseko [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2008 21:28 CST
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Yeah that TatxChiz pair ruffled a lot of feathers here and on fanfiction.net. I honestly didn't expect it to, seemed like a natural pairing to me. I like them though so I'm going to keep them. Thanks to all of you who have been with this story from the beginning. I'm certainly not short on ideas so we'll just see how many more chapters I can get out now that the characters and background are pretty developed.
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: February 25, 2008 11:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, once more will feeling! ;) First, yeah, I apologize about the low rating on the grammar, it was a bit harsh. This story might have some mistakes, but it's far from being hard to read. With that out of the way, lots of good things about this chapter. Though Shiroi is a wholly original character, she mixes in seamlessly into the canon, hell I had to double check whether she was even mentioned in Bleach. It was funny to see her try to mother Ishida. I especially liked how you handled Tatsuki throughout this last chapter. The last scene was most especially interesting (well outside of the explicit girl on girl action -_-;;;) since it had a decent bit of character development. HOWEVER you did violate one cardinal rule in fanfic writing (at least where I've seen cardinal rules) thou shalt not put author's notes in the middle of the story. Specifically, I'm talking about when Shiroi makes a comment about the Quincy Final Form. First, it wasn't really necessary and second, if anything you probably were better off just describing it in your own words. Would have been a lot of fun too, throwing out flowery language and complicated metaphors. Anyway, there were a few other very minor mistakes (read, MINOR) and I think I'll email you about those in the very near future. Otherwise, good job!
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Reviewed By: nonameonpurpose On: February 24, 2008 22:39 CST
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hmm...not really a yuri fan but i guess its fine...but still tatsuki and chizuru?
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Reviewed By: Shiseiten On: February 23, 2008 04:37 CST
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well, i didn't expect tatsuki to be with chizuru. XD an unexpected twist that set your story apart even more. and i don't notice any bad spelling, but i will be on the lookoutnext time.
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Reviewed By: nonameonpurpose On: February 15, 2008 04:30 CST
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well, there arent any excessive problems with your spelling and grammar, as what you like to think...>=3
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2008 11:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is intriguing. I like how you're tying things together as well as trying to come up with logical explanations for Ori's powers. The first few chapters are hard to read just because of how cruelly Ori is treated in HM, but past that I'm beginning to get into this. I also like how you've handled a very delicate emotional character. However your biggest drawback is spelling and grammar. Sometimes it makes this story hard to read. I strongly suggest finding someone to help you edit this thing or devote considerable effort into picking up those mistake yourself. Really, all of the pieces are there. Great plot development, great character development, but the technical errors are really holding this story back. But I wouldn't fret too much, though, technical mistakes are easy fixes.
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Reviewed By: Shiseiten On: February 11, 2008 18:50 CST
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finished all the chaps you've added. i can't wait to read the rest of the stuff, but the smut wasn't too bad either. =P haha. keep up the great work. i will definitely be back for more updates. ^_^
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