| "The Jinchuuriki Nine" Reviews/Comments [ 30 ] |
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Reviewed By: ya-ya-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2008 13:34 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yaaaay you updated ur story is still strong keep it up im happy u replied to my comment
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 00:10 CST
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Hmmm, interesting. Not a bad story, though I like your earlier chapters a bit better, this last one had some okay fights, but not enough descriptive details. Neh. Just pointing that out, follow the basic rule of writing prose, lots of detail, in the form of this simple advise: 'Show, do not tell.' Basically, describe the scene to it's fullest extent, down to the color of Gaara's sand when he uses it. If you do that, you'll have a much better quality story. Neh. COntinue to update, except for this small blunder, the story is great. So, update soon, ja ne.
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Reviewed By: ya-ya-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2008 14:09 CST
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yay u updated im not upset about the legth of the story i like long stories that just means u can show off more of ur talent cant wait to read more update soon HAPPY VTINES DAY
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Reviewed By: ya-ya-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2008 14:05 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As ive said before i love ur story and U MUST UPDATE!!!! Please and thank you
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Reviewed By: naruto rules [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2008 10:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
here is an idea for a jinchuuriki. he is always eating a bowl of noodles and looks exactly like longshot from the avatar tv show. he controls water like gaara does sand and makes it scalding hot.his favorite jutdu is the scalding water prison . it is the water prison with boiling water.he also likes to create creatures out of his water and the water whip. he gets his water from the noodle bowl. what do you think ,could you use him? you can even decide his personality and name
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Reviewed By: yourstruly On: February 12, 2008 17:46 CST
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hi there. your story is very captivating! but there is one grammar mistake that comes up frequently that is bugging me: to vs. too. make sure you're clear on those two. Other than a few other spelling mistakes, you're an excellent writer. keep updating! thanks!
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Reviewed By: Sitsuky [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2008 15:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yay your finally gonna make a fighting scene against team seven. Great story keep up with the updates
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Reviewed By: ya-ya-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2008 20:09 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU MUST UPDATE I LOVE UR STORY
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Reviewed By: Eddy! On: February 05, 2008 01:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Too....Good.........Eyes........Burn..........Extreme..........Awesomeness. ........
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Reviewed By: kandyapple08 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2008 16:03 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LIKE I SAID BEFORE CAN ANYBODY NOT LOVE THIS NARUTO FAN FIC?! BUT Y THE HECK MUST NEJI BE EVIL?!?! SORRY I'M A NEJI FAN BUT Y HE GOTTA BE EVIL AND HINATA ACTING LIKE SO 2 HIM? ISN'T IT THE OTHER WAY AROUND? OH YEAH! BEFORE I FORGOT SAKURA SUCKS SHE SHOULD BURN AND DIE THE DEVIL IS WAITING FOR HER!!! IT HIM WATEVER SHE IS (yup u guessed it i hate sakura!! :) )
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Reviewed By: kandyapple08 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2008 16:32 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Can anybody not love this fanfic?!?! It's so dam awsome!!! Also another great chap plz make ur chapters longer! oh yeah update soon!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Soliderboy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2008 10:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story it's pretty cool update soon
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Reviewed By: hippy34 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2008 20:29 CST
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like the story but naruto is too strong at the level u have him at now he could already take on an akatsuki member in a one on one fight he needs to b a little weaker or u need a really good reason ffor his power like the kyubbi has been teaching him since he was a kid
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Reviewed By: kandyapple08 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2008 16:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i LOVE the story update soon plz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: FxB [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2008 09:30 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story, I like it so far.
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