Reviewed By: Blue Wolf Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2008 18:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a cool story. though it probably would have been better if you hadn't made Shadow the best right off the bat, he should've worked his way up through the ranks 1st. I mean he just arrived in this world he should need time to get used to it even if he is the ultimate lifeform. The way your writing this fic is like your skipping to the end of a series, cutting out the good parts. I'm sure anyone else who reads this would like to know the details on how he got where he is on his journey and how & when he split up with Casey. No one is just automatically the best at something, they should have to work for it. In other words, the story started to go downhill when Shadow beat Ash, a very experienced trainer and one of the best at that, right off the bat without even trying. I mean, where's the character development. I understand if you don't want this story to be uber long, but if that's the case just make it a series, one fic for each region or something. Also, why can't you just let Shadow have normal Pokemon to start with and let him catch a lot of dark type Pokemon along the way, it's less confusing for the reader that way. I admire your creativity, but it just makes more sense to create an entirely new Pokemon than what your doing. Cuz' your way just might offend long time Pokemon fans to the point of earning yourself some major flame reviews from some people. This is just me giving you my opinion on how to make this story even better than it is, I apologize if I have offended you in some way with my views. It's a good story, I just feel it could be even better if you tried a different approach.
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