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| "Planet Vegeta: Final Rewrite" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] | | Pages (2): [ « ‹ 1 2 ] | Title: Zofo
Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2008 17:25 CDT
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Whoa, this chapter was a bit of a rollercoaster. So many questions answered but it added some as well. I never thought Frieza would be involved or Gohan was being controlled, though he was acting strange. Was Goten really only obeying him cos he was his brother and stronger? Hm, I'm not sure I trust Goten right now. The unknowing incest and dead baby were a great plot device and well written, though it grossed me out a bit which in a strange way is good. Leaves things open for Goku to get preggers again at some point too. So we are finally getting to Planet Vegeta next. Yes! Been waiting for that, but with these new revelations what will await them?
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2008 21:34 CDT
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Exciting chapter. Why didn't Goku IT them out of the police station though? Did he forget or was he still in shock? I hope Goku is alright, being riddled with gunshot wounds can't be good despite being Saiyan. Glad Chichi got her comeuppance at last, even though Goku will probably fret over his actions, she deserved it. Sorry to hear you are not well, I hope you feel better soon and can update some more.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2008 17:14 CDT
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Ok, I've re-read the chapter now you have re-written it and I think it works better than before, even though I don't believe in sin so wasn't too bothered about the original. Glad you left a note about when they would get to Planet Vegeta as it's taking much longer than before.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 29, 2008 20:03 CST
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Another chapter so soon, wonderful. Liked the explanation about the Angels of Hell/Heaven, it makes a strange sense. Goku is almost absolute good and Vegeta was absolute evil until he met Goku. Did Vegeta really let Goku mate him and get him pregnant so that he would be able to enter Heaven? His love seems more than that, but after all the lies he's told Goku, my head is reeling and I'm not sure. Gohan is very dark in this, I'm speechless at what he told Vegeta to do, then again could Vegeta control and manipulate what Goku saw when they fused? Maybe what he saw was false, maybe not. Don't care for Chichi and Mizuki whatever he/she is, I just want them gone and never heard of again. Leave our boys alone! So Goku doesn't love Vegeta? I'm shocked! I was sure he did (sprays love potion on Goku). Hopefully he will come to his senses soon, but the interlude with Goten isn't going going to help. He must be eaten up with guilt. Vegeta will comfort him. Goten needs to find a boyfriend instead of his father (calls Trunks). Sorry you have writer's block, I hope some of my questions might nudge you to write more.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2008 15:45 CST
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Vegeta seems a bit wimpish now, crying a lot, maybe the pregnancy hormones are kicking in. Hope he's back to normal soon. Glad Goku made a start on finding the dragonballs as I can't wait for planet Vegeta to be wished back, but how will Vegeta react to his father following Goku's revelation? I didn't really get the God stuff. I mean they know the Kai's and all about hell and otherworld so where does a another God fit in? Similarly why do they want to marry, wouldn't they prefer a Saiyan mating/bonding rather than follow an earth ritual? Maybe you will explain next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2008 17:21 CST
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Oh no poor Goku! What is the surgery going to do, does he has a cancerous growth? Just when everything was going okay with him and Vegeta, and a baby on the way too. Hope they'll be alright. Gohan seems a bit strange, chucking Chichi out but then turning on his father. What's really going on with him? Hope you can update soon.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2008 17:40 CST
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Thanks for including one of my favorite DBZ moments, Goku/Vegeta fighting cheek to cheek, always makes me smile. I take it Trunks isn't going to make a play for Goku, good, for a moment it looked like he would. Poor Vegeta pining over Bulma, surely he loves Goku more, after all they were made for each other. Not sure why Goku fainted at the end of this chapter though, but it's getting very interesting.
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Reviewed By: Zofo [MediaMiner Member] On: February 13, 2008 15:56 CST
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I'm finding it hard keeping up with these rewrites, is that 3 now for this one? Still I'll try to stay with it, and this one did fill in a few gaps from the others.
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