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| "New Love Hina" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] | Reviewed By: Cavpal On: July 13, 2009 12:37 CDT
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The human gene pool is corrupted, no thanks to you. Do us all a big favour and stop writing!
| Reviewed By: HiroshimaNagasaki On: March 05, 2009 07:46 CST
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Let me summarize it: 1. Guy with superpowers enters Hinata in place of Keitaro. 2. He tends to fall into similar situations, but solves them differently because of his power. 3. That mentioned difference is typically just avoiding any harm by jumping out right when threat comes or repulsing direct attack. Hm. That I could read, okay. Usually I seek some other things in stories I read. Namely, human interaction, in its reachest and tastiest sorts. Which means talk, calm, terse and substantial (90%), and action, simple and off-screen (10%).
| Reviewed By: Zhadow On: November 09, 2008 19:24 CST
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It's already fucking dead! Just leave it alone already. God, I swear I hate you people!
| Reviewed By: Korisovra [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2008 22:38 CST
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Why are you even calling this a Love Hina fic if you're taking out one of the main characters? You should call it "My Fantasies and How They Relate to Love Hina" It'd get the point across better than this pile of shit.
| Reviewed By: Ero-Sennin [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2008 23:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
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You are one of many, a face in a crowd, a writhing mass of SI/Mary-Sue/Gary-Stu fanfiction writers who don't realize how bad their shit is. Do yourself a big favor, read this story to yourself, and go read a better Love Hina fanfiction. Dare to compare, hell read one of the five hundred MILLION other SI fanfics, they don't even have to be Love Hina, there's a million of them in every other anime fandom. Your character is flatter than graphene, and you fall into the same tropes and pitfalls of every other SI writer, right out the gate you eliminate Keitaro, who in himself is a great character, and replace him with a human form of Shadow the Hedgehog with Urashima tacked onto his name to sound legitimate. The man is a boring cliche and I hate him, I hate how you've abused the existing characters, and I hate everything that you've written. Ever. Yes, that was a personal shot because frankly we don't need more of your kind mucking up the fandoms with your trite bullshit. Like astraluschornus said, kill this story, and don't you dare write another one until you've come back with something worth reading. Ass.
| Reviewed By: astraluschornus On: September 18, 2008 16:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gary-Stu = Sh*t-fic. Firstly, Zhadow is not a common Japanese name. It's not even a name at all. It's just a stupid modified spelling of 'Shadow' to make the character 'sound' cool. You probably even based the guy off Shadow the Hedgehog. Lame. Some advice: Trying to make any Original Character look 'cooler' than bloody possible (especially when making him MUCH MORE BLOODY POWERFUL THAN THE CHARACTER HE REPLACES) is just stupid and wrong. It also strongly implies at self-insert. Then his outrageous powers. Dude, he could rule the f*cking world with powers like those. That is b*llshit right there. Kill this fic dead. Now.
| Reviewed By: pak40l46notloggedin On: September 03, 2008 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story, though the chapters are a bit short. i hope to read more Chris
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