Title: Not too bad.
Reviewed By: Vassago-Toxicity [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2008 22:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
The idea itself is fine.It's an original idea, even though it does seem a bit too much like an over-powered God-like Main Character fic. You really need a beta, though. The spelling and grammar is horrible. Not too horrible that I can't read and understand it, but it's horrible enough that the errors all stick out like a sore thumb. The way you wrote it is also fine and it seems to have worked for this story so far. BTW, what does 'odzsisan' mean? Did you mean Ossan, or something similar which means 'Old Man'?
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