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| "Angels Are Made From Ink And Pencils" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: X (nsi)
Reviewed By: Xaenthe [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2010 03:09 CST
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You should continue this. I've had it favorited for ages. ;p
| Reviewed By: Kagome24235 On: July 23, 2008 19:14 CDT
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I have to say when i came across this story I could not stop reading. I search and i search to find a good story and alas I have found one. Ive been waiting a month for an update so i do hope that one is still comeing for i cannot wait to see what happens next. Lets just say Kagome needs to get together with Sesh. and ditch Inu. no doubt. well continue with the good work! Loved the story.cant wait for an update. and till then I will wait sitting here waiting for an upday
| Reviewed By: clnv On: July 20, 2008 15:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is nice to find something different and creative. Great job! You write well and paint vivid pictures of what is going on and how the characters are reacting. The only thing that gets a little confusing is your dialogue. Sometimes it isn't real clear who is speaking. But that is a minor mishap. It is a very enjoyable read and I look forward to the next chapter! By the way, the only "funky" thing I noticed was that you stated in the beginning of this chapter that Sesshoumaru is 29, but in chapter five, you worte that he has "become tired of my life even though I am only twenty-seven years of age". Anyway, thank you for sharing this story and your talent with us. Regards ~
| Reviewed By: Raeko [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2008 15:10 CDT
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Hm, this is an interesting start! AUs don't always catch my fancy, but this one sure has so far. I'll even take a couple of stabs at what's funky about chapter 8...because I just love cookies so much. (1) In chapter 1, Sesshomaru notices what Kagome is drinking down to the cream and sugar, but in chapter 8 he's never had one...so how would he know? (2) In chapter 1, Miroku asks if Kagome's boyfriend is tall, dark and handsome, but in chapter 8 it's obvious that they've known each other for years--Sango even says Miroku was the one to set Kagome up with Inuyasha--so he already knows what he's like. I also wondered in passing why he needed to set them up at all, since they work together, but maybe he just told her to give Inuyasha a chance..? Probably not super important, just something I noticed. Now, about the story, let's see. Sesshomaru seems pretty OOC, but I adore your characterization of him too much to let it bother me, and it's easier to do that in an AU anyway, isn't it? So don't take that as a criticism really. ^_^ In some ways I think he's probably very similar, and setting aside the lack of violent tendencies that can be explained by not being a youkai in the Warring States period, the major difference I noticed was a lack of his usual arrogance, and as I said, I'm not really complaining about it. I've gotten several warm-fuzzies from the little stomach-melting moments between him and Kagome, and it makes me really glad you're taking things slowly! I'm sure a lot of readers are wondering what the heck Kagome is doing still hanging around with Inuyasha when they don't seem to have much of a relationship, but in real life it can be hard to let go of what you have, even when you suspect it isn't really what you want. I liked your Kikyo a lot! It's amazing what people can do with her when they start thinking outside the box. Actually, I just loved chapter 7 as a whole--which is weird for me to say, since I have a tendency to let chapters run together in my mind--but the whole thing, from Kagome's fight with Inuyasha to seeking out Sesshomaru to the ballroom dancing studio, even down to Kagura and Naraku at the end, it was all fantastic. I particularly loved the way she vented to him in the park--that whole interaction was beautiful. Sigh. A couple of little spelling things, because I'm a nitpicker and homophones drive me mad: if you're talking about the little voice that tells you not to flirt outside your relationship, Jiminy Cricket style, it's conscience not conscious (the latter being a state of awareness when used as a noun), and it's pneumonia, not phenomena if you're talking about the illness. Gah, I wish you had another chapter already posted. Keep it coming--I'll be waiting to read the next one!
| Title: Shippo
Reviewed By: CrossoverQueen [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2008 11:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is absolutely amazing! I am so happy I found it. There was something I noticed though. In your author note at the beging of this most recent chapter you said that Shippo, Kirara, and Jacken weren't going to be in the story, but if i recal correctly wasn't Shippo mentioed in an earlier chapter? I think he was setting up for the art gallery/show in the begining.
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