Title: Great story... but.
Reviewed By: 2good4u On: May 10, 2005 17:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was indeed an excellent story, and it had so much potential. The Gohan having anmesia-thing, and ending up in the Masaki household was the main part that was enjoyable. The Tenchi characters are at least somewhat original, and the spelling and grammars was also good. Still, I do think this should have been romance between Gohan/Sasami and Ryoko/Tenchi (Which was darn good). You had the romance possibility thing going along great, and you later wasted it up with an Author's note in later chapters. :( Personally I thought it would have been alot better. Oh well, it's your ficcie. Anyway, there were a few things I wasn't quite fond of. 1. The idea of sending Krillin in search for Gohan. 2. Lime also going along for the ride. Like I said from the beginning, this fic had so much potential, but it later went downhill from this in my opinion. I was at least expecting Gohan to recover his memories in due time, go into crazy adventures with Tenchi and the others on Jurai or some unknown, recover his SSJ powers back, even getting some newfound powers (sword, SSJ3, Phychic, Magic, etc) along the way. Apart from all this, it's still a great fic, but it could have been better though.
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