Reviewed By: ponygirl2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2008 01:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
I've really enjoyed everything you've done that I've read. I do have 2 minor problems though, 1 is in some of the conversations are just what the various characters are saying not who said what so it's confusing, did character a, b or c say this line or that line so an occasional he said she said, etc would be a good idea instead of a bunch of 'unclaimed' sentences. The second thing is scene breaks, since everything is all spaced the same it takes a bit to figure out if the previous scene is still going on or not, so some kind of scene break would be good, even if it's a double space instead of a single or 3 dots, just something to indicate that one part is finished & they're somewhere else doing something else. Hope this is helpful.
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