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| "Alpha-Beta" Reviews/Comments [ 34 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] | Reviewed By: luvbug On: September 22, 2008 11:18 PDT
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i really like the alpha and beta thing i wish u would write a long fic that is more than 10 chapters with the alpha beta theme so ur readers get a deeper look on the pack everyday life.
| Reviewed By: psyco_chick32 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2008 09:33 PDT
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*grins* I love all your stories so much! I'm very fond of the alpha-beta thing, especially when it comes to InuYasha's pack being mostly human!! Thanks for a fantastic story and an excellent lemon at the end... You're right, when you write, porn IS plot!! (sorry, I'm kind of exclamation-mark-happy today...) Only one thing I notice - you have a tendency to use "passed" instead of "past". For example, it is "past" the well, as past is a synonym for "beyond", as opposed to "passed", which is a past-tense verb (and the well won't do any passing, except for the passage of time, as it's fairly stationary!) *grins* Sorry, I've got a little grammar-nazi blood in me...
| Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2008 08:40 PDT
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Yay! Well, you know I like it! And thanks for such a neat giftfic!
| Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2008 02:58 PDT
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That was cute. ^_^ Using the documentary to explain Inuyasha's canine behavior was a nice touch. I'm always intrigued by fics that explore his inu youkai side. And while the whole "alpha" bit has been done many, many times, I really liked your take on it with him seeing the two of them as being engaged in a challenge for the alpha position until she draws blood and wins. It was a nice set-up for a satisfying "mating." ^_~
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