| "An Unscripted Secret" Reviews/Comments [ 20 ] |
Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2009 05:52 CDT
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this chapter brought a balance to their ideals of each other. he's trying to change her to someone who will fit his life, and she has trouble thinking of him in his own right and not some perfect figment of her imagination. i love how this story not only entertains me, but it makes me think, too. the posibilities of self-exploration and angst are so wonderful. i really like the design for the table. since the picture is not in color i'm assuming that you are doing it in grey scales. if that's the case i think a nice contrast would be to have a very small (1/4" to 1/2") border around the main design in red. if you want to increase the oriental look, run an even smaller band of gold next to the red. i love irises. they look so fragile, but have great strength. the only problem is that they only show the beauty of their blooms for such a short time.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2009 01:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*gasps* OMG WHAT!!!!!! AWWW!!! I WANNA KNOW WHATS CHAPTER 5 ABOUT!!! wait... it has to be something about Koga right???
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Reviewed By: Silver Dog of the Snow [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2009 17:55 CDT
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Yay updates :) I'm loving the drama, and personally believe you are doing an awesome job! Keep up the good work and storie :) Banzai!
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2009 19:55 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*falls out of chair* Kagome is going to do WHAT!?! *looks around* OMFG!! INUYASHA FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT TO STAY WITH HER!!!!!
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2009 07:48 CST
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i'm still in love with the idea of trying to relate to your perfect man, so i guess i can overlook a few missing contractions. i cant wait to see where you go with this story. i found it ironic that her 'perfect man' would immediately try to change her. how would it affect a person to know that the person they've always been isn't good enough for their ideal mate? i know he thinks he's helping her come out of her shell, but it has to feel like a rejection to her, doesn't it? oh well, i'm glad that you're so good at working out the storyline. thanks for another great chapter.
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2009 06:26 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nah its all good.. :P she gave me the same looks when i was reading Twilight LOL.. anwyays Oo Kagome has overcome that side of her!! take that Inuayasha! XD im waiting until the time comes when she slips and says Sesshomaru instead of Inuyasha.. or maybe Kagome mumbling Sesshomaru in her sleep.. hmmm cant wait for the next ^_____^
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Title: :D LUV IT!
Reviewed By: Inukag-mirosan lover [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2009 23:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i LOVE IT!!! that was such a good chapter. and i kinda get that line now. :P but, it's still kind of confusing! That chapter was SO good. Can't wait until chapter 5!!
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2009 05:42 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*giggles* you had me smilling all the way through this chapter! my mum kept on looking at me weird LOL anyways soon Kagome would be comparing the little things between the two XD cant wait for the next ^____^ Oo im signing up on your site :)
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Reviewed By: tres_chic [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2009 11:56 CST
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i love this story! i love how inuyasha and kagome interact, its just soo cute :) and how she gets so flustered when he's around her its adorable! cant wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Silver Dog of the Snow [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2009 15:07 CST
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O.O I LOVE IT! more more :) Your writting has always been good and this is absolutely the best. :) I can relate to this story very well and the Inuyasha/Kagome relationship is absolutely divine. Great details. Thanks for uploading the story. :3
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Title: I love it!
Reviewed By: Inukag-mirosan lover [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2009 12:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!! I really like this story! Its actually really creative and I like how theyre kind of like oppossites in a way! Haha. Cannot wait for the next chapter! What did he mean though when he said he thinks he already has set up the twister mat? It confused me!
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2009 05:56 CST
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i really like the idea of this story. to be able to actually find the man of your dreams, your perfect man, would bring about all manner of questions. will he live up to her every expectation, and if he doesn't, can she still accept him in spite of it. the old saying 'be careful of what you wish for because you just may get it' comes to mind. the problem that i had in reading this chapter is the formality of it. you seemed to avoid contractions with a vengeance. at one point, early in the chapter, you had inuyasha use a more informal speech pattern--"Ya want me to walk you up to your room?" he asked when he returned her phone to her.--then went back to the more formal with his next line--"If you are sure," he told her. it makes the tone of the story confusing. i prefer the more informal tone, but that's just me. great story, so far. the thought that you've put into it really shows.
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Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2009 00:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooooo, this is gettin' good! I can't wait to see what happens next!
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Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2009 20:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woah this chapter was hot! I see Kagome is starting to distinguish between InuYasha and Sesshomaru, but hmmm...will it be enough? I am starting to wonder, too if her Sesshomaru's personality is that of InuYasha's in canon or his own. Loved the chapter! Very steamy towards the end...damnnit! And I said I wouldn't read the spoiler this time! *pouts* I'm gonna do it.....until next chapter which I am most definetely looking forward to! ~Amber
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2009 02:32 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squeals and falls off the chair* HE KISSED HER!! HOLY CRAP!!! i dont know why, but i like how you make it that Kagome keeps thinking Inuyasha as Sesshomaru.. just show us attached she is to 'character' XD
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Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2009 16:04 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmm...lets hope Kagome doesn't slip up and call Sesshomaru...InuYasha out of name. Very suave he is with that date AND with being able to get a second out of Kagome. And that KISS! Until next update! (*runs to personal site to see when that'll be*) ~Amber ;)
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Reviewed By: Kryptoinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2008 12:32 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahhhh.....I knew you couldn't wait.... *blushes* I'm glad I could help out, now go knock 'em dead with your writing prowess! *grinning*
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Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2008 04:27 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*squeals* i truely love it! but last part where Kagome turned to Miroku and said 'Him' got me hooked!! cant wait for the next chapter :P
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Title: Review :p
Reviewed By: gothicgirlinlove [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2008 21:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lets see all i can say is I loved it!!!!! let me know when you update
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Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2008 20:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! I love the story concept. It can go in so many directions and I'm eager to see what you do with it. Will it turn into a love triangle between InuYasha, Kagome, and her fictionalized obsession Sesshomaru? Kikyou is in the picture, so what will happen with that? Can Kagome, who seems deluded by her world and "perfect" fantasy learn to accept reality? All things I'm already dying to find out! Until you update next on this! ~Amber
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