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Title: when the spring comes
Reviewed By: sis_25 On: January 28, 2009 15:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow! that is all i have to say i just love your story.
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Title: Chapter 4 review
Reviewed By: Happyreviewer On: January 26, 2009 20:30 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read what you have so far and I like it! Aside from one maybe two spelling errors you have done a great job for spelling and grammar. Most of your spelling errors are minor ones at best. Also just one other thing. Every once in a while you may wish to manually spell check it. Because spell check doesn't always get every single little mistake. A computer is only as smart as the person who made it. Plus a computer is foulable and it can make mistakes. It is not imposable. Now here is a example. This is one I found in chapter 1. Anyway here it is. : dammit.: I believe that you could have ment Damn it. However you could have been trying to imatate how Inuyasha speaks in both the manga and in the anime. If that is the case then I appolagise profusely. It's no frown on you I myself have made the mistake. Also everyonce in while you may accidently type a right spelled word but it may not work for the sentence. Here's a example: chapater one this is near the end of your story. Inuyasha took one of his hands up and massages on of her ears. Now you may have accidentally typed on of her ears, istead of one of her ears. It's a common mistake it happens to everyone. Even to the most experienced of writiers. I'm eager to see what happens when Inuyasha meets Kagome's mother. They always say meeting your mother inlaw is tought. I wonder how her mother will react to the fact that her hanyou daughter is now mated to a full demon. But not just any demon the demon lord Inuysha who rules the east. It will probably be a shock for her when she finds out. Will she try to keep her daughter Kagome and Lord Inuyasha apart. If you would please update more often. Also I'm curious if Inuyasha will meet Kagomes' mother then does that mean that she may meet Inuyashs's father, mother, and his older half brother Sesshomaru. Just curious. Anyway great job! Keep up the good work. Your chapters are long and well written. The lemons you write are nice and juicy too. You put one in about every chapter. You do it in a good way though. Having just lemon after lemon can get boring with no advance ment in the plot of the story. But you are creative in how you place them. You use your sweet juicy lemons to advance the plot and move it and the characters forward. Humm I wander will the two of them have childerian? Inuyasha may want Kagome to "help" him make a heir. Back it the feudial eara it was costomary to make sure the lord had a heir. Preferably a male heir who could continue on the family line. Who knows? I don't. I'm eager to see how you will put in the other characters as well. Moroku, Sango, Shipo, and Killala. Please of give my spelling errors on everyones names. I hope I spelled them right but something tells me I didn't do a very good job of it. I'm curious are you using more manga based material to write your story or are you using more anime based material. Just wandering which you did. Anyways will Miroku and Sango be demons or will they still be humans. You know a leacherous priest and a demon slayer. I loved that paring for the manga. They were second only to Inuyasha and Kagome. Hummm.........Now if Miroku is a priest he may want to kill the demons he finds. But he could have a heart and not want to kill all demons. Will he still have his wind tunnal in this story? Sango is a demon slayer. Everyone knows she is good at killing demons. Or will she end up trying to kill both Inuyasha and Kagome. Naraku will probably fit in somewhere in your story. Knowing his character he is probably not the hero. What type of vilianous plots will he hatch up in this story. Well Naraku is a half demon. So he could want Kagome for himself. But then agian maybe not. It's been a while since I have read such a enjoyable fanfiction story. You have a lot of tallent...... Also please forgive me for being soooooo long winded. I just got out of a english class and my proffessors lectures are still drilled into my head. Darn it! Bye! Chow!
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Reviewed By: stockes On: January 23, 2009 22:50 EST
Comment/Review:
Great job. I wish you would update a bit more often. I like the story so far.
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Reviewed By: animeangel47 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2009 15:40 EST
Comment/Review:
update soon
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2009 08:45 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
great update... now that inuyasha & kagome have made up... what else is in store for them... what reactions will there be... update when you can... please and thank you...
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Title: I remember
Reviewed By: Kittenyoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2008 14:15 EST
Comment/Review:
Hey there I remember when you first started this a long time ago, I don't know why thought, but I'm glad it's posted back up.
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Reviewed By: coykoi On: December 19, 2008 21:53 EST
Comment/Review:
How can Inuyasha still be upset at her? Oh well. I just love this lemon filled story. I wonder what Kagome's mother is going to say about her daughter's new mate.
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Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: sunrisegoodbyes [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 20:45 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chappy! Of course Inuyasha would catch up to Kagome. Lol. Love the story and i will continue to read as long as you continue to update!! =) Until next time!
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 19:45 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... inuyasha caught up to kagome, of course... at least kagome told inuyasha why she ran... seems that they have a better understanding of each other and their situation now... what's next... update when you can... please and thank you...
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Reviewed By: Hentai Strumpet [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 16:34 EST
Comment/Review:
SORRY. I WAS WONDERING, DID YOU WRITE THE FIRST CHAPTER A LONG TIME AG0 BECAUSE I SWEAR I READ THE FIRST CHAPTER ABOUT TWO YEARS AGO IF NOT THE FIRST CHAPTER LOOKS LIKE THE FIRST CHAPTER OF A STORY I READ A LONG TIME AGO.
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Reviewed By: Hentai Strumpet [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 16:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this story,please continue.
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 05:38 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
interesting story... like it so far... wonder what happens next... update when you can... please and thank you...
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Title: 0_0....
Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2008 00:48 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! Good lemons but...is there going to be a story? Or is every chapter going to have lemons in it? Inuyasha is going to take her to his home (if they GET home..) I wonder what going to happen to kagome...she is a hanyou. I wonder if Inu's dad is going to be in it. Errr...not the lemons the story.
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Title: hahaha
Reviewed By: sunrisegoodbyes [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2008 22:55 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow very good smut. Lol I can't wait for the next one!
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Reviewed By: Nick F. On: December 18, 2008 10:13 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice. Can't wait for the next chap!
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