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| "The False Apocalypse" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] | Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2010 01:13 CDT
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Hmm... your picture of Famine comes from Ninja Scroll. Can't remember if it's the ninja lady with a poisonous body (and is raped twice in the movie), or if it's the snake lady with the living snake tattoos. AND HOW FUCKING DARE YOU TAINT ALUCARD WITH ZANSATSU! He is the father of Trevor Belmont (from Castlevania III) and possibly (as I have no real knowledge of japanese crap) of Maria's children. Hmm... the Bevelle images are really tiny. Could be an issue with Google Chrome, or they weren't saved at the right zize. And by small, I mean I would need at least four of them to cover the front of a Credit Card (stupid capitol one commercials). On your FF.net profile, you say Yuske. Do you mean Yusuke Urameshi from Yu Yu Hakusho? Still pissed Cartoon Network gave it an unmarketed time slot AND didn't replay the entire series. Still no idea what really happened after Yusuke knocked out Koenma when he tried to seal that unfinished gateway-thingy. Oh yeah, at my house, occasionally my older brother quotes Kuwabara by randomly yelling 'URAMESHI!'. The first few times I thought he was saying 'YUR A MACHINE!'. Hmm... Chapter was a bit short, considering how long since you last updated and hmm... all, but writers block is a bigger bitch than Sesshoumaru's mother (which, oddly enough, will NOT get you killed for saying to his face; you get killed for talking to him instead). hmm... Keep up the good work. And remember, you just have to ask and I can come up with technology or obscure jutsu. Or random ass quotes. Remember what Adam Savage always says - Everyday objects can in fact be made lethal if Jamie builds a gun to shoot them. And yes, that constitutes a random ass quote. TO THE JEFFREY'S TUBES! ::clacking coconuts can be heard as I hop into an industrial grade ventilation shaft while singing Vash the Stampede's Killing Song::
| Title: Her eyes were Cobalt Red, her voice was Cobalt Blue...
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2010 09:30 CST
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If you know where the title came from, you probably watched the trailer for Vampire: The Masquerade - Bloodlines. Though, those lyrics still predate the final game of Troika and the precursor to Fallout 3 (or, at least, it's current incarnation). As to your description of how Naruto held that scythe... I punch Nazo for his stupidity. That actually is a defensive stance designed to protect the Scythe wielders weak-point - his back. Also, a Scythe wielder who blocks a blow with the butt of his polearm can use the momentum in a fulcrum strike with the blade. The exact same technique Nazomishi was using with that Bo Staff. I will give you props for bringing up a staple from old Kung Fu movies. The Mook Jong (Wooden Man), as it is properly called, is a quintessential training piece for the Martial Arts. To tell you the truth, I only know the name and it's translation from Issue 289 of Dragon Magazine, which is dedicated to Kung Fu, Ninja (which is both the singular and the plural), and turning D&D creatures into Kaiju. That ain't no mountain... THAT'S A FUCKING KAIJU BULETTE! No fighting a giant burrowing Land Shark. Bleh. I use 'bleh' too much in my reviews with you. No matter. And what was with your authors note? You made it sound like you have images available to look at, yet made no reference where to find them. Though, it could just be that they are available through your profile on another website which you have not brought up or mentioned. Now, if you'll excuse me, I need to refill my rabbits water and check his food. He's an ok roommate, even if he thinks I'm eyeing him for a meal. DEBERGERAC, HOW CAN THINE CUTENESS DERIVE SUCH DEPLORABLE ACCOUNTS!?
| Title: Command Override
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2009 22:32 CST
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Sendos Eht Seiken Genko Virago Sey Vega Enzyo; Sektos Mistuus, SEROUC! (Scream in Terror for the Gathering of Blood shall Devour their Souls and Destroy the World; Burn this Veil, I COMMAND IT!). Sorry, I just destroyed your universe. I WAS RIGHT! Those fucking mutates WERE after Zansatsu. And yes, I am making up a language. Side-effect from playing too much D&D and watching so much god-damn anime. Though, it is necessary if I want to retain my intellectual property. Can't exactly right an independent story with people using abilities from existing (and completely separate) licenses. Maybe if I work it as a parody, but then it would destroy any cool factor they may develop. Goliath Empire stuff is prototype for my Doomlord work that I plan on (nothing to do with the british comic of the same name). Whatever. I still just sacrificed an entire planet to destroy an entire universe by cutting it off from the rest of reality (basically I disintegrated everything, reducing it to the bare components of reality as it gets recycled into a jelly dildo in GTA. Life's a bitch, ain't it? But yeah. I got lazy for a bit, and my sleep patterns went wonky as well. Otherwise it wouldn't have taken so damn long to read these last four chapters.
| Title: H1N1 Swine Flu
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2009 01:11 CST
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More douchebags? Sheesh, this Torment nigglet and the stupid bitch are retarded. Hanicas is already considering cutting his losses and summoning SDFs 1, 2, 3, the entire SDF-7 range, and every Zentraedi warship with a Reflex Particle Cannon to completely annihilate your realms so as to remove anymore dimension hopping piss-ants. Or maybe just collapse their universe. To take a page from Mythbusters 'If it's worth doing, it's worth overdoing'. Bet those pukes were looking for Zansatsu. Fucking dickless piss-ant ass-whore zealots of eternal assrape via Nazi's and their Self-Loathing Jew leader Adolf Hitler. So much fucking weak ass power, Hanicas will have a field day with the Soul-Sucker Proxy. And his personal galaxy sized pocket dimension where he has entire planetary armies where even the rejected janitor can withstand a pointblank shot from a Haydonite Synchro Cannon. The Einar from Nordic myth are uber-fucking tough since they can go toe-to-toe with the Frost and Fire Giants of Jotunheim. And take out an entire army of super-beings led by Loki single-handedly (cutscene from Marvel Ultimate Alliance). And don't get me started on armies equipped with Gundams from Gundam Wing. 500 Wing Zero Customs on the horizon. Jaffa, KREE! (bye-bye Iran). Bleh... Such bitches... MAKE THEM FACE ELRIC OF MELNIBONE AND THE BLACK BLADE! Let's see how they like that shit... And the instantaneous decapitation of every single being with a head in their universe. And the eating of their souls in the spiritual stomach of a 7 ft. tall Romanian Interdimensional being by way of Oregon. And the combined might of the Goliath Empire. And flying tampons of doom. And desmurficating adult diapers. And being forced to watch the cast of Mad TV perform their sketches live. And the explanation why Duckman is the one true god. And why I couldn't possibly be Jesus. And why I make strange comments that bring to question my sanity. And why Dilbert and Lt. Worf would be friends. And why Odo and Spock are so lovey-dovey towards Tribbles. And why Captain Picard and Bill Goldberg are the new Dynamic Duo. And why Bavarian Cow-Tipping should be an Olympic sport solely because Doctor Strange is a practitioner. And why I am apart of Dana Carveys Cult of the Golden Orb AND the Cult of Colin Mochrie. Now, if you will excuse me, I'm going to watch this week's Bleach from Adult Swim and then listen to music while imagining Sasami Jurai is blasting Los Noches apart with the Jerry Lewis reference 'Goodness, Gracious, Great Balls of Fire!'. Unsure if she will shoot fireballs or just destroy everything with vocals. Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - If only I had a brain... ~ Me, Myself, and I. Not referencing the song. I just wish I had a brain instead of this mass of random neurons that will drive me insane before my centennial, let alone before my 500th birthday. I will live longer than that, by the way. Someones got to be the universe's Lightning Rod of Hate.
| Title: Johnny Cage is not afraid to die!
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2009 08:23 CDT
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Look up Mortal Kombat the Album by The Immortals. It's awesome. Ok now on to the review. Danzo is dead? YAY!!! TAKE THAT YOU CRIPPLED PRUNE-FACED PENIS-MANGLER! Murder by hair? YOU JUST RIPPED OFF TWO DIFFERENT MEMBERS OF THE GOLIATH EMPIRE! First one to have deadly hair (Hanicas uses his pony tail to grab things and throw them, nothing else) is Tala Krouser, the Rabid Kitune of the Bloodied Claw (predates my knowledge of Naruto), whose hair rips and shreds along with her six clawed hands and raking feet (name comes from the pair of fox tails she has; like Tails Miles from sonic). The is Jason Krouser, the Bull God, whose green locks are based off of a super-hero from the TMNT cartoon on fox several years back. So bleh... Oh yeah, both were created before I heard of the Anime Basilisk. Ok. Now the little prick who killed Kyle Katarn? Hanicas just stares at him for 3.14 seconds before the kids mind explodes because he cannot comprehend a being that fucks with Cthulhu for shits and giggles and at the same time pampers him like a spoiled child, all within the space of 3.14 seconds. Oh, and said being's existance completely disregards the notion of mortality AND immortality. Eating Set alive can do that. And so can permanently killing Apep, who is a TRUE Immortal (it is impossible to kill him, at least permanently). Bleh... For the second chapter... Neji must be clinically insane. Fate favors the bold. Naruto is bold. And the Jinchuurinki of the Kyuubi no Kitsune. And a Hanyou who is absorbing the Kyuubi's power. And the son of the Yondaime Hokage. And the master of learning the Rasengan in a WEEK! And master of the Rasenshuriken. And the Inheritor of the Hiraishin. And the epitomy of a prankster on a level that Coyote and Raven regard him highly. And the Inventor of the unbeatable Oiroke no Jutsu (no mere henge, that's a true physical transformation). And Konoha's #1 Most Unpredictable Knuckleheaded Ninja. If only he was born on 3.14 or 3/23, then I would worship the ground he walks on. So, as a whole, as his name implies, Neji has a screw loose. The treatment: Evisceration (Hellraiser quote). This may be the longest review I have ever written. Now remember, logically insane (or insanely logical) interdimensional beings are the bane of of idiots with rediculous concepts of existence. And they really enjoy Sasami Jurai's cooking skills and a nice steaming cup of Moka'jino (assuming that's how it is spelled; damned Klingon Coffee). Ja ne, Hanicas is going to rip Hueco Mundo apart with the Super Fist of the Nose Hair! Dicke Family Motto - Grab life by the throat and rape it in the ass. I may have said it, but my mom is the one who decided it was our Family Motto.
| Title: The Siege and Investiture of Baron Von Frankenstein's Castle at Weisseria
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2009 01:55 CDT
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Imagine he was me, and I was called FRANKENSTEIN! Another song from Imaginos. Puke fiend Nazo is not nice. As for your explanation of the 'Inners', it doesn't make much sense. From my limited understanding, Kenshin's alternate personality came about because of a combination of childhood trauma and the shear number of people he killed. I know that, and I haven't even watched Rurouni Kenshin since they first played it on Toonami. Heh. Discovered that Disney XD (toon disney?) is going to play Naruto Shippuden. Oddly enough, the preview was to play during a week dedicated to Wolverine (specifically the mid-90's X-Men cartoon and the two-part episode from the mid-90's spiderman cartoon). Didn't see the preview, but added it to my wish list anyways. THANKS TIVO! But anyways, I want to bitch slap Nazo and his crappy Sephiroth wannabe-look-a-like ass through a couple dimensions before sticking the barrel of a Naruni NE-6 Magnum Plasma Cartridge Revolver (and its patented 3-inch diameter bore) into his asshole and blowing his 'man-bits' off. My older brother calls that 'The Baxter Treatment' (any handgun will due, just chose a massive revolver for theatrics). Maybe then he will show some respect to a burgeoning Tenma Shukun (Demon Lord; Youkai refers more to ghosts, spirits, and phantoms than it does demons). Or I could have a Micro-Singularity Emitter take up a geostationary orbit above him and randomly destroy inanimate objects around him to make him a pariah to the superstitious before finally ending him with a (un)patented Ryu Shidenmai - Kujiku Yochi (Dragon's Flash Dance - Crush the World) from one of my Swordsmen of the Immortal King. An Iaijutsu strike with enough force that just unsheathing the sword can unleash the force equivalent to multiple atomic bombs (they are responsible for the Tunguska Event in several realities) without even striking an opponent is nothing to scoff at. Heh, suck them nuts, Nazo. Yeah. He was a prick in this chapter so I'm picking on him. Oh well. Keep your powder dry and your hand on the trigger. Semper Fi. Yep. Quoting Gunnery Sergeant R. Lee Ermey. Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - In accordance with Statute 73 of the Awesome Act, Ninja's are hereby banned from Peach Orchards ~ Hanicas reminiscing about the song 'Peaches' by 'The Presidents of the United States of America' Check the music video to get what I mean.
| Title: In the presence, of another world...
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2009 01:34 CDT
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THE BLUE OYSTER CULT! Look up the album 'Imaginos' and its entire background. it's awesome, even if the tracks aren't listed in the correct order for the story they tell. Damn, not much has happened, except my discovery of Green Dreams on AdultFanFiction.net (FF7; yaoi; no sex in it as of yet). Cloud is just so cute being flustered by forced time travel. Freaking out Reno and intriguing Zack and Sephi-chan is a plus. HAHA! Take that you egotistical douche! Note that only in Japan does the size of one's possessions bare no relation to penis-size. So no overcompensation. Heh heh heh... bleh... This story is coming along nicely. Even though more people are apart of the Zate than initially indicated. Hayate and Jiraiya are a given, as they are both dead. Sarutobi is quite awesome, but I understand that he may want to retire from all this fighting. He is one of only a handful of survivors from the First Secret War, the others being his team-mates/councilers, the traitor Danzou, Madara, and Kakuzu (Hidan is a possibility). Heh... Jashin is impotent when compared to the immense might of the gods in D&D, and that's just because of how strong their priesthoods are (when you ressurect a mule, and your only issue is the paltry cost of 1000 gold coins worth of diamonds, you know you're awesome). Ah... not much action, but plot abounds. And that more than makes up for the wait and lack of action. I may have a taste for the ultraviolence, but I still need plot and story. Hence why I haven't worked on my own fan-fiction. Being inspired by music does have it's down points when you try to come up with plot while listening to heavy metal riffs that scream for a Kenshiro-class beatdown (HOKUTO NO KEN!). Keep up the good work, beware evil flying tampons thrown by Naruto but blamed on Shino, and the little Venus Fly Trap sitting on my window sill. Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - Meanwhile, in Gotham City ~ How Hanicas segues out of conversations My first encounter of that phrase outside of the Superfriends was in the WinMUGEN fighting game emulator Software. a custom Batman jumped down and proceeded to beat down a weak version of Juggernaut from X-Men vs. Street Fighter. Also had Rimururu (from Samurai Shodown) and Soujiro Seta (from a Rurouni Kenshin fighting game) team-up and beatdown both the weak and the strong Juggernaut. Freezing powers plus an ultra-fast screen jumping kid? AWESOME!
| Title: Talk about a dimond in the ruff...
Reviewed By: Stepmaster_Spoony [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2009 03:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In all of the time I have spent reading fanfiction on this site,(which is a LONG time) this is probably the first story that I have actually gotten addicted to. Your style of writing and the way you progress the story is absolutely wonderful, and the actual story itself is superb. I myself had a story idea very similar to this one, but I never went with it. Also, I love the way you incorporate the characters from other anime/manga into a series that isn't there own. You adapt the character to his/her new environment while still keeping the characters original personality. I just love that ability in a writer. The few things that disappointed me was the fact that the few 'original' characters aren't that original at all. Like how David...I mean Hitokiri...I mean Nazomishi is based off Sephiroth. I mean, I like the idea of modeling a character after Sephiroth, but to make him look EXACTLY like him only with blue hair is kind of unoriginal, and to make his child self look like one of the other main characters only smaller,(with blue hair, of course), is also kind of a creative letdown. I could also talk About Rei, but it's basically the same thing. In truth, the only thing original about them is there personalities, but even that could be called into question. Another thing that really bugs me is how you completely skipped over what happened in the X-men dimension. One minute everyone is in Star Wars land, the next Naruto World, then in the next chapter, it turns out that it wasn't Naruto's world that they all went to, it was Wolverines world, where they stayed 100+ years and then left with Wolverine himself, THEN arriving in Naruto's world, and the X-men world was explained in a two paragraph flashback. NO, it doesn't work like that. If you decide on one world one chapter, then publish it, then think "Hey I want to put someone from a dimension they haven't gone to yet to be apart of the group now...Hmm how to make it work...I know! I'll have it so they did go to that dimension before the one there in now, even though it's clear as day that they never did!" then you made one hell of a bad writing decision, not to mention a huge fucking plot hole. It just ends up making you look bad. Either way, it's already said and done with. Anyway, I like where your going with Nazo's curse mark. I just can't wait until the 'One Winged Angel' is born. That and Safer Sephi...I mean Safer Nazomishi too. Well, keep up the great work, and try not to make anymore messy plot holes, it's unbecoming of you.
| Title: Atom Crash
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2009 23:44 CDT
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HAHAHA! I JUST CAUSED YOUR BODY TO UNDERGO NUCLEAR FISSION! Seriously, Hanicas can cause all the atoms in a person's body to undergo nuclear fission, in effect making the Crimson Alchemist a mere amateur. He does, however, erect a sphere of force around the target so as to not destroy the country side from the release of energy. The radiation, on the other hand, is completely negated by Hanicas's command over radiation (as shown by the fact that a radiation sensor will explode like a DBZ Scouter if it views him). He also can generate Gamma Ray Bursts from his bare hands, but it's just for show; he prefers the visceral feel of lesser powers, such as his hands, optic blasts, the Super Fist of the Nose Hair, or even the Super Fist of the Ancients (i.e. summoned bowls of ramen). RANDOM IS ME! So many deaths. If I was a sadist, I would have protein stains all over the tiny cubicle I sleep in (Oregon housing code states that a bedroom MUST have a closet to be classed as such). Oh well, keep up the good work. Though, I thought you would have had Wolverine use his moves from Marvel VS. Capcom, or shoot a laser like he does in the beat'em ups (Collossus detonates like an atom bomb in the same game). Oyasuminasai [Goodnight] The Goliath's Commandment - Have you ever had one of those days where your bowels tear forth from your face and declare themselves to be a sentient life form from the planet 'Mik'? I call those days 'Wednesday'. ~ Hanicas's initial thoughts on Martian Successor Nadesico A friend lent me the series. I'm tempted to annihilate them.
| Title: The Kings of the Nordic Twilight
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2009 00:11 CDT
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Who is this 'Nilus' you speak of? Is it yet another factoid posthumoysly added to their group, like Wolverine and their mutant powers? Man I want to fire a couple dozen missiles at people now, and I don't know why. Oh well, I'm still waiting for the opportunity to Pro-Kop to the death of a high profile child molester. Though, his death over-shadowed Fara Fawcets death. Bleh, current events suck. Oh well. In the words of Niell Young, 'Keep on rockin' in the free world!' The Goliath's Commandment - Logic is my Insanity; Insanity is my Logic ~ Hanicas's response to Vulcans / Yeah, so what if a created a Cannabalistic right of passage as a parody of religious rituals. At least I'm not worshipping a Zombie, like 80% of the western hemisphere ~ Hanicas on Christians Hey, I derive entertainment from my own pseudo-insanity. And I personnaly believe in Jesus, despite the fact that I do not ascribe to any religion, let alone an Abrahamic one. Besides, if they admitted Jesus was a Zombie I would be carrying around a cross with a little zombie nailed to it out of respect.
| Title: schizophrenic
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2009 23:50 CDT
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The only obvious wrongness in this story. But it's ok, while I typed it correctly I did check it on wikipedia to make sure it was spelled right. I almost sent fat tendrils to choke out Nazomishi when he unsealed that scouter. I thought you sent them through DBZ for a second there. Right now, only adamantium boned regenerators could survive there, and that's only if you don't introduce vibranium and other metals capable of damaging adamantium. Or Majin Buu's polymorphing tentacle ray. Keep up the good work, beware headless chickens, and Pro-Kop to random songs of awesomeness. The Goliath's Commandment - Ahhh... We're half way there... Ahhh-ahhh, livin' on a prayer! As I said, random awesomeness (now listens to Cotton Candy by ICP)
| Title: OH WE OH, KILLER TOFU!
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2009 04:52 CDT
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A DOUG REFERENCE!!! I find that quote hilarious for some reason. But oddly enough, I don't find it arousing, so I am not a trivia master ::wonders where the hell that came from:: It's been a while since you last updated, but that is ok as others have waited longer ::decapitates a random christian in protest of Zendura taking his sweet time:: Uh... I thought Hayate suffered from a lung disease he was born with... Man, so few updates across the board. Oh well, keep up the good work. Ja ne! The Goliath's Commandment - He Died Listening to Rush, 2112 Oh yeah, before I forget... BOW BEFORE THE IMMORTAL MIGHT OF RUSH AND THE LYRICAL TONES OF GEDDY LEE & THE PEERLESS SKILL OF NEILL PERT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Title: The Red Dawn!
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2009 01:20 CDT
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Yeah, since you have Wolverine, I had to give an exclamation. There is a movie called Red Dawn. Russia invades the midwest. The resistance calls itself the Wolverines. Russians mention Wolverine from X-Men. Only remember that scene, as I didn't really watch it. Was Wolverine the only recruit from that world? I can't really think of anyone else except X-51, and that's only because of the song 'The Son of X-51' by Powerman 5000 (wiki it). Wait. nah... my knowledge is mainly from 'The X-Men', the saturday morning cartoon that was on FOX during the mid-90's. ... And I just had a wierd thought. Akatsuki means Red Dawn. Wolverine is mentioned in the movie Red Dawn. X-Men aired on FOX. Naruto has a fox sealed inside him. Coincidence!? Yeah, unless for some reason you are given ownership of all fiction licenses. Oh, another wierd thought from a couple hours ago... In all the media I know of, humans will never rape a non-human (bestiality and lewd conduct with dolls notwithstanding). I'm like the Autistic Bill Engval, but without the redneck. Oh well. Now that was a neat way to get them into the Naruto-verse. My mind was all over the place and dismissed Naruto immediately. Good job, Snow Job with a Kennedy Voice (GI Joe cartoon reference). Two-claps, a bloody squat, and three Deadite Girls Gone Wild (Lordi reference)! Just beware the Chainsaw Buffet, the secret ingredient is screams (more Lordi). Oh well, may our favorite Supermonstars shout the Anthem of the Phantoms (Lordi again) to elevate Nazomishi to Doomlord (Dream Evil reference now) and travel to where the dragon rules the sky, you wake up just to die, where the river flows with sand, the kingdom of the damned (an entire verse by Dream Evil). Just don't open the Libertina Grimm (Cradle of Filth), unless you wish to face the Dirge Inferno of the Foetus of a New Day Kicking (two Cradle of Filth songs), as you will then know what it's like When Worlds Collide (Powerman 5000), and you must witness the awakening of The Thing That Should Not Be (Metallica singing about Cthulhu Mythos). Now, if only I could find my Flux Capacitor. My DeLorean is just sitting there... (wish I had a DeLorean; cool looking). Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - Our name is Goliath, and we are Legion! Oh yeah, Nazomishi is Sephiroth and Rei is the chick from Heavenly Sword (can't recall her name). Hm... I'd really like to see Rudy Roughknight punch someone now... I'm sure his Knuckle Dusters will make a spectacular blood splatter across the wall.
| Title: We smoked some Monster Hash
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2009 03:21 CDT
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YAY!!! NEW CHAPPIE! Uh... wait, it was uploaded ~3 days ago, but still... Yeah, my sleep patterns have run off again, so now I am getting sleepy around 12 am instead of 4-5 am. And I get on the internet at about 8-9 pm, spend several hours checking my email, gamestuff, and myspace... Just explaining why there is a delay in my reading, as I get the messages from here about them being uploaded, but I'm just tired by the time I actually come here. Oh well, enough with the info on an autistic Oregonian with an overexplanation obsession (can't remember what it's called). I was kind-of wondering who Nazomishi would be paired with. Due to the lack of mention, I am guessing Asohka Tano from The Clone Wars isn't in your story. Don't actually watch the show, nor have I played any Star Wars games aside from Pod Racer on N64, so I have limited knowledge. Never read the novels either. You may not have either, as Palpatine is supposed to have a large number of clones to transfer his essence into (not sure if they predate the Empire or not). As for now... What reality is he in now? It does not seem to be Naruto, so it must be something else... not Full Metal Alchemist... Samurai Deeper Kyo? hmm... Inuyasha? naw... Trigun, maybe? For some reason Fruits Basket and Recipe for Gertrude are intruding into my mind (don't know anything about the former except it is EXTREMELY YAOI; read the first volume of the latter). Um... Transvestite Cannibal Nazi Hooker Midgets from Uranus Prime? Mad Max? Terminator? naw... Half-Life/Portal? Avatar: The Last Airbender? The Belgariad/Mallorean? The Prydain Chronicles? The Westmark Trilogy? Anything by Tolkien? Anything by R.A. Salvatore? Harry Potter? Better not be Eragon, Shannara, Wheel of Time, anything by Dan Brown, the Starchild Trilogy, or the collective works of Larry Flint. Ninja Scroll, maybe? Valkyria Chronicles? no, bandits aren't in that one. Legacy of Kain/Soul Reaver? Final Fantasy of some sort? Secret of Mana/Seiken Densetsu? Xenogears? None of that Xenosaga bullshit. Doesn't sound like a gundam... wait... SAMURAI 7!!! ... maybe. Like Kikuchyo (don't know how it is spelled). Not Megaman... Tales of series? Brave Fencer Musashi for the PSOne? Robotech after the 1st Robotech War against the Zentraedi? Not Bubble Gum Crisis... Not Outlaw Star... Definitely not DBZ... not an anime/manga/comic series where everyone dies... Or have you crossed into P&P RPG's like D&D? Open-ended games are near-infinitely difficult to do if you want an ending other than complete and utter failure. Not Pokemon or Digimon, nor Gurren Lagann. Too lazy to continue guessing. Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - Our name is Goliath, and we are Legion! Hey, as written in my profile, I will welcome suggestions for my Goliath's Commandment bit. Hi ho Silver, away!
| Title: As my brother put it: Hack, Slash, Smoke some Hash and kick some ass!
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2009 16:21 CDT
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WOOHOO! That was badass! Keep up the wonderful work. What did you mean by 'warcraft'? I didn't mention anything from Blizzard in my reviews. The WH, WH40K, and LotR stuff is miniatures wargaming (with several videogames in the WH and WH40K settings). The Palladium stuff is P&P RPG's like D&D, though with their own style which is largely the same as it has been since the origional Mechanoid Trilogy. They also produced the Robotech RPG many years ago and are updating it with the Robotech: The Shadow Chronicles RPG (they reaquired the license for it). Hmm... That little 12-sword bit reminded me of Castlevania: Lament of Innocence. The vampire in the underground telekinetically controlled swords to spin around him and thrust forward and such. Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - Our name is Goliath, and we are Legion!
| Title: Forgot...
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2009 04:12 CDT
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Japan is called Nippon-Koku (Sun Origin) by the Japanese. Now you know, and knowing is half the battle!
| Title: Youngling Murder Averted
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2009 04:10 CDT
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Well hot damn! Though, I didn't really like the fact that you skipped over the Kenshin-verse, seeing as how they would have gotten a bit more knowledge on technology that way. How many realities do you plan on interacting with? I am curious as to how many of them will intersect with my knowledge. I mean, It would be cool if it intersected with D&D (Eberron, Greyhawk, Forgotten Realms, Dragonlance, Ravenloft, Spelljammer for D&D in space) and the Palladium Megaverse (Palladium Fantasy, Heroes Unlimited, Nightbane, Splicers, Ninja's and Superspies, and the Mega-Tech eras of Rifts and Robotech; side-note: there are preexisting dimension crossings in the Palladium Megaverse, any one place leads to the others WITHOUT your hyper-tech device). Though, you probably should avoid Warhammer 40k due to the willingness of all but two major factions to destroy planets (Tau want to integrate them; Orks want to fight the inhabitants). If you are unfamiliar with these things, then I am sorry. On a side note, Warhammer Fantasy, Warhammer 40k, and the Hobbit/Lord of the Rings are connected already (Games Workshop does the miniatures game for LotR). If you are familiar with Rifts, look into the Manhunter setting. The only book made for it had limited printing, and as the makers (who were a third party) are all gone, it is no longer illegal to download it. Terminators in space is a quick description. Just ask and I will help as much as I can. Ja ne. The Goliath's Commandment - They never expect you to move after you decapitate yourself ~ Hanicas on teaching young regenerators how to catch their opponents off-guard, with combat footage of Hanicas decapitating himself with a chainsaw, then shooting tendrils of muscle from his neck to pull a squad of special forces cyborgs into his stomach for digestion (extradimensional pocket + Level 9 Bio-Hazard Acid + lamprey like rings of shredding teeth). Yeah, I already was doing cross-dimensional stories since 8th grade. I just suck at writing, and the random outbursts of insanity kind-of interfere. But then again, when was the last time you saw someone decapitate a half-dozen FBI Agents in his frontlawn... with a jelly dildo(!?). No, I am not a sexual sadist. It's just demeaning to be killed by an innocuous sextoy. GTA San Andreas shows that.
| Title: S.C.R.E.T.
Reviewed By: GoblinKing2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2009 00:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, well, well... Secret societies, modern-day Hitokiri (hey, cross over with Rurouni Kenshin, Samurai Deeper Kyo, and Ninja Scroll for more), and super-tech. My oh my, what wonderful eyes I have seen! And he has a hand-built Wilk's Laser Sword? Cool. Too bad it's not a bottled plasma weapon (Gundam Beam Sabers and the beam sabers from Robotech/Macross continuums), electromagnetic plasma weapons (Kittani Plasma Melee weapons from Rifts), or a Hard Light blade (Lightsaber from Star Wars). Heh, heh, heh... I humblely offer my assistance to you for the purposes of developing advanced tech. Super-Tech is your main focus, it seems, though teleport-type devices are super-tech. Time machines are mega-tech unless they are powered by a naturally occuring phenomena (yours is mega-tech at this point). Reality hoppers, which only go to alternate versions of the source reality (and not realities that would be fictional, such as the Gundamverse and Naruto), are ultra tech unless they use naturally occuring phenomena (yours is now ultra-tech). Dimensional Gates, which can do what the previously stated devices can, are capable of going into realities, planes, times, and dimensions that are purely fictional. These are hyper-tech devices. Your device, even if it is directly powered by naturally occuring phenomena, is considered hyper-tech solely because of it connecting to a fictional reality. Note: send me the relative statistics of anything and I can rate it. Energy weapons are always super-tech at the minimum. Rail Guns vary (whether electromagnetic, gravitonic, or inertial). I will try to be prompt. Actually, you can send pretty much anything for me to review and rank. Some items may change rank depending upon your description and its in-story effects. My E-Mail address (and myspace account) is in my profile. Oh... Beware Italian Child-Cyborg Assassins (at least, I think the Gunslinger Girls are Italian). The Goliath's Commandment - Our name is Goliath, and we are Legion; Uh... I think I just cut Cheyenne Mountain in half with a monofilament wire... What? Humanity hasn't even crossed the oceans yet? Never mind. Stupid fucking phase-shifter... Yeah, I am knowledge uncarnate
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