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| "Vengeance" Reviews/Comments [ 371 ] | | Pages (25): [ « ‹ 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 › » ] | Title: Amazing!!
Reviewed By: yunglucyboo On: October 12, 2009 20:37 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry if i happent reviewed this fabolous story when you posted it originally. Ive been reading this story from my phone. I couldnt complete the review because at the end, it ask for users to type in a security code. Omg let me stop and just tell You how much i loved this chapter. To even make it fair Im going write one for ch 14 too. Now thats off my chest i can continue my original pursuit. Thank you for writing this wonderful story, I love every bit of it. The chemisty with bulma and vegeta is just perfect. I love the part when bulma tells vegeta that she would rather be spanked, then punish his crew, for payback. I could feel the electricity in the air, when he said "Maybe later". That did it for me, I was laughging, I could feel for bulma. Pure comedy at its best. I love your story. Thank You!!!
| Reviewed By: gamergirllive [MediaMiner Member] On: October 12, 2009 19:32 PDT
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D'awwww...! So sad!!! D= It almost makes me not upset that you've denied me Bulma/Vegeta encounters this chapter! XD As always... Great chapter! Keep writing!
| Reviewed By: gamergirllive [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2009 23:16 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Waugh! I must read more! I'm really excited to see who the spy is, and what will continue to happen with Bulma and Vegeta. ^^ Keep up the good work!
| Reviewed By: Xaverri On: October 04, 2009 05:03 PDT
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Silver lady crazy has a good point, actually I can't wait to see the interaction between Vegeta and Mrs. Briefs, I always LOVE those parts in any fic, and the cartoons! You're really leaving us hanging yet again, I want mooore, mooooooore! Can't wait for Puar/Radditz, you've kept us waiting for 2 chapters now, I demand they meet! :P :P Just kidding of course, it's your story and either way you write it down is perfectly fine by me because you sure seem to know what you're doing :) God the sexual tension between Veggie and Bulma is too much, just him standing behind her and touching her arms like that...*shivers*. Hope you write more soon! Loved this chapter anyway :D -X- Xaverri
| Reviewed By: Silver Lady Crazy [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2009 02:57 PDT
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I agree totally with Guru, about that Vegeta´s sick inside. These mind-games are really unnerving. At least he took the first shot. It´l be really difficult to cure him, indeed. It was really touching the exchange between Chichi and Gohan... that reminds me of those children who suffered abuses and avoid people out of shame even though it´s not their fault _ like Sohrab, from The Kite Runner. I bet it was Mrs. Briefs who gave those clothes to Vegeta. :)
| Reviewed By: not a member On: October 03, 2009 21:27 PDT
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Wonderful chapter. Glad to see the interactions between Bulma and Vegeta, they are highly entertaining and have great promise. I am glad to see that ChiChi and Gohan are having a talk -- I am really excited for the next chapter's jump back in time. Also -- interested in any potential interaction between Puar and Radditz. Great work, keep it up! Thanks
| Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2009 10:46 PDT
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I love them. Their interactions are just so priceless. The thing about the spanking was so funny. It's good to see that Vegeta was as enamored by 'Blue's' voice as Bulma was with 'Vengeance's'. They were both being pulled to each other before they even knew it. Great update, I can't wait for more.
| Reviewed By: Vegeta's Blue-Haired Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: September 26, 2009 13:50 PDT
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Uh ohhhhhhhhhh..... Poor Bulma... depending on what /kinds/ of things Vegeta wants to do! Gah! Update soon :D
| Reviewed By: Lollie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2009 06:12 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aw, Bulma just did not like seeing Vegeta in pain. Moreover, she already lost her threesome fantasy so you cannot punish her guys. And, poor Goku and Piccolo have only been checked on once throughout the story, but you know I am actually fine with that. Hope Vegeta is not already leaving Red Station because of Frieza. Wonderful chapter!!
| Reviewed By: not a member On: September 20, 2009 17:23 PDT
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You are an amazing writer. The character development in this story is so extensive, and there is much evidence of that in this chapter. Gohan has developed more as a character than I thought he would, and I am eager to see any developments between Radditz and Puar in the near future. That could get messy... lol. I am honestly shocked at the treatment of Chichi by Gohan -- I really wonder why he is so distant from her and doesn't defend her and such. I am also looking forward to Bulma and Vegeta becoming closer in later chapters and Vegeta's interactions and thoughts about Bulma. He is still very mysterious, especially it seems now that his identity as Vengeance is revealed. Great work, keep it up! Thanks!
| Title: Loves it!!!
Reviewed By: yunglucyboo On: September 20, 2009 16:41 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wowers is all i can say! lol i just lied to myself, i think im gonna continue to rant how wonderful this story is!!! Great chapter, it was fun to read. Thats the one thing i like about ur fics, they dont seem cheesy or easy to figure out. Other than that I like that v/b met again lol. Vegeta is such a complex person, i just cant figure him out. But that's what i like about him, and u hit on a nail every time with ur descriptions. Great chapter and I look forward to the next one u write.
| Reviewed By: Nintendocat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2009 07:44 PDT
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Interesting! I wonder what's causing him to react like that to medicine. I also wonder what Vegeta's plans for keeping her with him are. Such a cliffhanger you've left us with. I can't wait 'til you update. Keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: Xaverri On: September 20, 2009 04:37 PDT
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"If Vengeance and Vegeta were the same person, there went her favourite threesome fantasy." My favorite sentence of this chapter :D I was on holiday when you posted the previous one, so I'll review both at once! First off I LOVE TFS, and it's great to see you support them and even able to fit in a tribute :D I recognised it immediatly! I love your humor, but I think I already mentioned that! It's now a certain that Tien is Ginyu, and with Gohan's revelations to everyone present, I don't think it would've mattered for Vegeta to stay conscious in the tank. I have guessed that Vegeta needed to stay focussed in order to surpress his powerlevel? Which is obviously a good reason not to keep him sedated! Tien/Ginyu is gonna tell on them anyway, so I hope he gets cought soon :S Either way, it's a massive cliffhanger once again, and you manage to do that so brilliantly every time! I also hope, like a previous reviewer that ChiChi and Gohan atleast get to talk, but I also understand why he's avoiding her at all costs. We've yet to see Puar and Radditz meet, but I think it's great we got to see inside his mind, even when he was under the shower *blush*. I wonder if he has a special trick to rinse all that hair of shampoo :D Gohan is gonna be surprised to see Puar, and it's gonna go downhills for our kitty from there :P There is just so much for you to write, you have (succesfully I may add) weaved several seperate stories together, which will probably make this a tale of epic proportions, not focussing on one thing (Bulma/Veg), but trying to make everything as complex as possible to keep us guessing all the time :) I do miss a bit more of Goku/Piccolo, but I am sure you have your reasons for that and I am eager to see it play out. Further more I am pleased to see hardly any errors in this chapter, you've certainly improved on that one as well making this whole story lift to another level! For now I just have to see how it plays out (please update soon again :D) but if you continue in this fashion this may prove to be the best AU story I've ever read! Especially how you manage to involve all the original DBZ characters without making it any awkward, or unnecessary. Everyone is just as important :) I think I've said about everything I can say, hope to see you again (next week?) with another chapter :) Goodluck!
| Reviewed By: Silver Lady Crazy [MediaMiner Member] On: September 20, 2009 02:37 PDT
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Radditz could end up with all the shampoo in the ship, hehe! But I must confess I´m a little angry, now... thanks to Vegeta, now everyone is without the tank, and Gero certainly won´t give them one of his. Nice job, Vegeta! I bet he demanded for Bulma to stay in order to... touch his skin and soften her a bit. Just hope he´ll give her a new tank afterwards, but I don´t believe much. Hope Gohan and Chichi might fix things up... that made me a little sad. If Radditz wasn´t so sticky...
| Reviewed By: gamergirllive [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2009 16:18 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hooray!!!! I hope you update again soon! I'm anxious to see what happens next! I'll bet Ginyu spilled the beans!
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