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| "Kingdom Hearts: Trinity" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: what title?
Reviewed By: inexistant perfection On: March 25, 2013 18:06 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
6 words. Must. Read. More. Please. Write. More. please also notify me if you put up a new chapter (I'm basically begging you :P) my email address is: Voiddragon777@hotmail.com or you can message me on skype: voiddragon777 if it says im offline, then im probably just invisible to stop people talking to me when i don't want to talk... however you will always be welcome to talk to me about this story, i loved the part where Riku says that Sora will be used as: "Sora, the amazing human shield" also, it would please me greatly if i could spell check any more chapters? hope to talk to you soon and hope this story is still going. | Reviewed By: Vospader21 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 02:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright here's a compliment sandwich. I start with something good, talk about where you need improvement, then end with something good again. Disclaimer: I do not own the the compliment sandwich, it is the property of Family Guy. I love the way you made the characters OOC, it was simply hilarious. You spelled munny, munni, it's supposed to be munny. This fic shows much promise, and in a few more chapters may be the funniest kh fic out there. I gotta be honest I envy you sometimes, I wish I could write something as funny as you can, but I'll never be able to do it, my personality is way to serious. Um, I have request could you make a Riku X Yuffie pairing. I've never read a fic with one, and after running some thoughts through my head, and lower body "giggles perversely, like Kakashi with an new Icha Icha paradise book," and it seemed really interesting if you catch my drift. So please grant this humble reader/fellow writers request. One more thing what do you mean the teeth of the oblivion look like the kanji for darkness? I'm looking at a pic of the oblivion and the kanji for darkness right now and I see no similarities between the 2. Ok, until next time then and I'll make sure to promote this fic on my own, by.
| Reviewed By: Vospader21 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2009 02:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woohoo first review. Ok, the opening was a little clich'ed but otherwise acceptable. I was laughing my ass of at alomost every line but that's kinda what I've come to expect from you. Have you ever considered a career in professionall comedy writing? Also i think it would have been better if you labebled this chapter as Ch.1 instead of prologue. Overall this fic shows promise, keep writting, and I'll keep reading. Oh, and please put a lemon in somewhere along the line!!!!!!!!!!
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