| "Partially Kissed Hero" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
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Title: The Wandering Soul of 1014
Reviewed By: Clouddancer1014 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2009 10:46 PDT
Comment/Review:
---You could have posted something to tell us that this was here. Honestly, I was waiting for another update saying something like this. Enjoyed the chapter, and I hope to see more from this and others in your stash. Happy writing, and update soon!
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Title: Hi!
Reviewed By: Ms Lilly [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2009 10:24 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I decided to try to find you on mediaminer after your latest chapter on ffn. Well... I found you! ^^; Yeah... I'm adding you to my favorites here in case you ever quit ffn. Now you know you'll have at least one fan if you continue posting here. :) (I'll probaby keep forgetting to review though... ^^;)
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Title: Daniel14541
Reviewed By: Abadon666 On: September 07, 2009 10:23 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I just found out that you had actually created an account here! Congratulations! I also really like the update! dlonc@sbcglobal.net
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Reviewed By: madhatcat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2009 20:57 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Glad you fond a site to put your old and new stuff on!!Can't wait to see what you got in store for us now!!I got my eye on you!!
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Reviewed By: sdarian [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2009 16:10 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Complete? While the headmaster is dead, there is still the issue of voldi.... but really, at the very least I would like another chapter to act as an epilog, as this ends too suddenly without allowing for any kind of cool down to let you know that the story is finished... Good job anyway. I'm looking forward to reading more of your other stories, as well as any you might write in the future. Good luck!!
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Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2009 11:59 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thank you for sharing this fantastic story i love it im glad to see you found a good site to keep wrighting it on thank you for sharing
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Reviewed By: EternitynChaos [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2009 00:58 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hiho LH nice to see you have found a new place to post your fics, I'm rather embarrised that I didn't even think of MM.net /laugh guess that shows how often I came here to read before your stuff got posted. I've been rereading what you have up, still as much fun as it was the first time I gave it a read. I'll be looking forward to seeing the rest of your stuff up here. well, hope life is treating you well Alex
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Reviewed By: Bobboky [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2009 17:51 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome to see you posting somewhere.. I hope to see the rest of your works here soon. I have been a fan for a long time.
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Title: Editing Is Your Friend
Reviewed By: Terdwilicker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2009 07:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm. Having read this story from your first post over a year ago, I'm frustrated with it. On one hand it has some very interesting ideas in it, worth pursuing. But on the other hand, it falls into didactism (and then he brushed his teeth) as if you've lost sight of the plan of this story. I suppose I'm disappointed because this could be better whereas now I'm thinking this is your therapy that happened to be posted online instead because for some reason you don't like Sims or Command and Conquer video games. Its micromanaged obsessive detail rather than storytelling. If you wanted to turn this idea into a story you'd have to cut a lot of material out, about half, and think hard about pacing, about Point of View, and leave the overlapping obsessive planning aspect out. In the last ten chapters you've been treating this as an architecture lesson on building secure towns. An interesting subject, to be sure, but wrong for this story. The last twenty chapters have been almost a constant resupply crossed with Witches Secret mechanical storytelling, and that's not a good thing to be compared to. That's why I'm thinking you may be suffering from OCD and too much stress, thus this is your therapy. Trouble is, you're trying too hard. A suggestion? Write down your entire plotline, including what you've already done, in simple outline, and see if you have a character arc that will end up how you wanted it to as things are now. If not, time to correct the mistakes. Another suggestion I will make is like many of the HP authors you're a bit too focussed on outrage at times, to the point of wrath and monomania. Lots of HP authors do this to exclusion of sense and kill their stories. I suspect you're triggering emotional outbursts as you write, reliving some bad experience. Lots of people have similar, but if you let things go and write about that, you may get healthier and be able to return focus to your plotline and character arcs. I don't think you can save this story. You've taken the essential Harry, a kid with high tolerance to pain and determination and turned him into a rich magical super!Harry with no real limits and no drama possible. Its cancer, and you're wasting time writing it further. Start over with a fresh idea. Avoid the cliches you fell into here. Unless this really IS stress relief in which case, feel free to continue. Lots of people write as therapy. They just don't write good stories much of the time. Sorry if this comes across as harsh, but I only lie to my friends.
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Reviewed By: sdarian [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2009 19:52 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story. So, have you decided to move all of your stuff here, or are you going to keep posting to both here and Fanfiction.net? Ether way, I'm glad to see that you will continue writing as you are a great writer and I love reading your stories. Good luck, and keep up the good work!!!
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Reviewed By: Rubel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2009 17:30 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good to see you've quickly found another site to use. I'm looking forward to your next works.
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Title: dennisud
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2009 09:07 PDT
Comment/Review:
Happy u found another site, will check periodically.
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Title: fan
Reviewed By: piedscribbler On: August 29, 2009 05:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Glad you found a new site hope you upload the rest of the story soon.fanfic.net is evil for driving you away!
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2009 01:08 PDT
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Holy crap thi sis awesome. Continue to update, because if you don't, I will hunt you down like a dog and cornhole you. Ja ne!
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Reviewed By: kjoc On: August 28, 2009 16:15 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so happy that you found a new site to post on. I love your fic. I can't wait for you to catch up to you were on fan fiction. I look forward to reading more.
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