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| "Stars in the Sky" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: katsuhito [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2012 09:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I think this is one of the best R.5 fics I've seen so far. I love the way you're taking the characters from cannon and developing them into something we can connect with on an emotional level. There were several scenes throughout the story that had me almost in tears. So, the review page says to explain why I give such-n-such a rating, so here goes: Style:9 - very well written, and easy to follow, along with a good balance of plot building, action, and character interaction. Spelling/Grammar:9 - just a few typos and homonym errors. Nobody's perfect. :) Originality/Creativity:10 - One of the few R/K fics out there (that I like), and the mechanism for Super!fying Ramna and Kasumi was definitely new. Since I like Super!Ranma stories, that was not a detraction. Enjoyment: 10 - 'nuff said. Overall: 9 - The only reason I didn't give a 10 overall is 'cause it's not done?!? Since I enjoyed reading this story so much, I'm very disappointed that it's incomplete. I'll check out the posting on ff.n, just to see if it's just this site's version that isn't done. If not, well, it's been 2 years, so I won't hope too much. :) | Title: Ch. 01
Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2010 22:44 EDT
Comment/Review:
While not a fan of the Ranma/Kasumi pairing, I'm more partial to Ranma/Nabiki, I'm not against it either. In any case, the only real problem I found with this first chapter was the very beginning. That being Ranma's desire to end it all were, supposedly, based on honor which turned out to be his fear of becoming female (and only lightly touched upon 'honor' due to the seppuku pledge). There was no real mention of the conflicts of honor Genma had forced upon him, nor of the ones Nodoka herself had done so, nor of how Nodoka willfully ignored Genma's dishonor and attempted to have Ranma resolve while failing to give him any means of doing so other than committing seppuku or dishonoring himself. As long as Genma and Nodoka lived, and Ranma was not the Head of the Saotome family, there was nothing he could do to resolve _any_ of the honor conflicts Genma and Nodoka had created. Instead, you focused solely upon the "Man Amongst Men" seppuku pledge and all but ignored the rest, and upon Ranma's fear of becoming female. Nodoka could have released Ranma from the pledge at any time and, technically, had already removed it as an issue when she declared Ranma 'manly' despite the curse. It was her _continued_ use of the pledge, despite her declaration of it having been fulfilled, as a means of controlling Ranma's actions and forcing him onto the path she wanted him to follow that caused the continued stress for Ranma. In short, you focused too hard on Ranma's dysphoria and all but ignored the rest, which hurt this story.
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