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| "Lights Over The City" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: response to ponygirl2112
Reviewed By: Catalina_NekoYasha [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2010 05:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'll have to ask my co-author, Kim, about chapter one. As for what someone named Kim, Meg, or Maxine are doing in a IY/YGO crossover, basically read the description/summary or some past stories (though I will admit that past stories are horribly written and obviously immature, keep in mind that they shouldn't reflect upon my current writing style/ability). Or continue reading and you just might understand what exactly we're doing in the story. As for the melodrama, it was intended. Really, this is for the enjoyment of said Meg, Kim, and Maxine (or at least Meg this time, since Kim and I are writing it), but I do appreciate your curiosity. Hope I could clear some things up.
| Reviewed By: ponygirl2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2010 09:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well except for being confused as all get out as to what someone named Kim (& later Meg & Maxine) is doing in a supposedly IY/YGO crossover, I think you may be going for overly wordy or melodramatic & screwing it up a bit, I mean from the 1st paragraph of chapter 1 what is a worm glass? I think the end of chapter 2 got cut off since it ends at; though she was a good 4
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