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| "Kindergarten Flirting" Reviews/Comments [ 84 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Title: Really?
Reviewed By: weyrdkat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2012 12:34 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really? People stopped reading because of the renchaku? I thought it was extreme to her at a couple of points, but in no way did I feel it was out of context with the rest of the story. He wasn't hurting her on purpose and if he didn't know he couldn't fix it. I liked the idea rather than all the "marking" that everyone does all the time. I'm kinda sorry to see it go so soon, but I hope you can get it to fit the way you want your story to go. I really like the way the dialog played out in this chapter too. Keep up the good work. | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not logged in) On: April 01, 2012 17:35 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I could see why people might of not liked the idea of the Renchaku, but I didn't mind it. Stories are made up and the author can write about anything they want. Anyways it didn't bother me, it made me giggled =P and I just love how they yell at each other at work, makes me laugh haha. Cant wait to read what happens next =P | Title: I love you!!
Reviewed By: Sango Tajiya [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2012 11:59 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the best stories I've ever read in my life and I haven't even finished it yet. Every LINE is just filled with hilarity and brilliance. You've had me cracking up in my room all day and you have me waiting at the edge of my seat to see where their relationship is going. It's romance but it's REALISTIC romance and I can see where they're both coming from y'know? It all makes sense. I also love how you put Naraku in the story, but you didn't put him as the stereotypical villain. This story is just fuckin AWESOME!!! THANK YOU for making such a great story. ^_^ | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2012 20:29 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Perfect chapter! First of all, I was going to start this review off with "Bwahahahahahahahaha!" because I was literally Laughing Out Loud through damn near the whole thing, but that serious bit at the end there tampered me down enough so I'm not still laughing my ass off. But back to the laughing my ass off, that shit was funny! Oh kami...*wipes tear* and then just when I think we've switched over into less-funny mode you have a guy named Kanji Romanji? WTF? LOL! But that seriousness at the end there...I gotta tell ya, that's my personal favorite kind of plot device. This is exactly the type of situation I was hoping would happen. Although I hate to do anything bad to Kagome, really, I like the scenario of Inuyasha being a dumbass, and it taking something bad happening to Kagome that snaps him out of it, preferably with that something bad being a direct result of something he did in his dumbassedness. I'm sorry to hear you lost some followers because of the Renchaku, but for me personally I like the idea. Although, strictly speaking from within the story's POV, as if that universe is real, then I do not think Inuyasha should have done that if he really loves Kagome and I can agree with why the Renchaku was banned. But there again, he was just being a dumbass. You've revealed now that he didn't know how badly it was really affecting her, physically. He thought it just made her more 'heartache' and depressed and longing for his presence. Not that she could literally not breathe and could very possibly, actually die from it. And it makes perfect sense, because it's a demon curse, so it's magic, you don't need to explain it beyond that, and for back in the day when the woman could always be with her man then no harm done, but in this day and age? I'm just REALLY glad the trip to Canada had been bogus from the beginning just to screw with her, and I'm even more glad that you've thrown in a way that it can magically be reversed as well. Sure why not. It's your invention so I won't argue what can and cannot be done. But even if it can't be undone, worst case scenario now is that Inuyasha will make sure he's around Kagome 24/7 until it wears off but he'll be inconsolable in his guilt. That might do him some good, actually. And Kagome, too, because then she would realize that he really does care, that he hadn't meant to put her through so much torture, and maybe, just maybe, she can forgive him then. I said it before and I'll say it again, whatever you decide to do is fine with me. Some people out there might be quitters, but I could never quit you. ;-) | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not logged in) On: March 26, 2012 06:18 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nawww its like a cute dream with the both of them having coffee XD when will Inuyasha tell Kagome that he aint leaving? like will he pop into work monday morning and surprise everyone?? haha anyways i love it and I think that plan is going to backfire on Kagome =P | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2012 11:31 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww...sweet update. Looks like even though Inuyasha is still mostly his cocky-bastard self he does also feel at least a little bit guilty for what he's putting Kagome through. I'm definitely glad that he's not actually going to Canada, because that could've created an honest health risk, with how bad her attacks seem to get in his absence. Sango was probably right in telling Kagome to just suck it up and agree to spend time with him, to stop torturing herself, though I'm anxious to see if she'll still want to throw him off their office building once the two weeks are up. In the meantime, can't wait to see what happens with your little subplot with Sango playing seductress. Update as soon as you can! :-) | Reviewed By: DemonInuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2012 09:46 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read a lot of fan fics on here and by far this is my top favorite #1. Please update soon! And I hope you write more fan fics! And sorry to hear about your family. | Title: Bad Puppy!
Reviewed By: weyrdkat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2012 04:50 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WB -- I'm so sorry to hear about your family not doing well. I hope everything in Bangladesh gets better. Thank you for posting before you left! Fantastic chapter and I can't wait to see who gets the last laugh! It's so good! | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven (not logged in) On: March 15, 2012 00:24 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
to think that Inuyasha was that evil to make them believe he was leaving. my eye was twitching lol but Im happy its going to go on longer =] and I hope your grandmother gets better! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2012 18:39 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry to hear about your grandmother, but I'm happy to hear that this story's still going strong and will be longer than originally anticipated! I love this new addition of the demonic 'promise ring' bite mark thing. I'm relieved Inuyasha's not actually going to Canada, that wouldn't have been fair to do to Kagome if he really loves her. I also can't say I blame Kagome for telling him off in that maybe she would have loved him but not now after this. I do think he really did do it because he really does love her and it's his way of saying he really seriously does want her with him, but there is the key word, serious. He needs to grow up, just a teeny tiny bit. Love his personality and sense of humor, and I kind of agree with Yura, it is funny, in a way, Kagome's plight, but I know if I were her and just barely trying to deal with such a cocky bastard I used to hate and might possibly be starting to fall for, him pulling this stunt would've royally pissed me off, too. LOL, perhaps it can be one of the things Kagome eventually looks back on and laughs about later. However you continue the story from here on out is fine with me, I'm super looking forward to seeing what happens next, though I must admit a part of me is hoping Kagome can actually resist the pull of the mark no matter how crazy it makes her to the point that she's actually torturing herself, just so that Inuyasha can maybe, maybe get serious for two freakin' seconds and apologize for doing that to her, and then she can make the scene funny again by totally collapsing into him in utter relief and horniness since she hadn't seen him in a few days, LOL. Like I said, though, I'll be happy with whatever direction you take this. It's your vision, not mine. Update as soon as you can! | Reviewed By: angel-up-above-heaven [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2012 01:30 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
BAHAHAHA! Thats the most perfect punishment ever! I LOVE it XD | Title: E-V-I-L
Reviewed By: weyrdkat [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2012 09:07 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG that was evil. So sexy, but evil. Poor Kagome - she's getting it back plus. I think in a week, she should just put him out of her misery. Can't wait to keep reading! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2012 07:04 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the idea of the renchaku; kind of like a promise ring before the actual engagement ring that high schoolers might do. It's refreshing to see somebody making up something new for the fandom, and hey, if it catches on and you start noticing it in other stories you'll have the pride of knowing it was your idea. And speaking of...that was pure evil genius! Inuyasha's really gonna get it now! But poor Kagome in the mean time! Ah! Update soon! LOL. | Title: ooooh.. . .EVIL
Reviewed By: weyrdkat [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2012 05:12 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was another really great chapter. I think your dialog is put together very well, even if there are a couple of qualifiers that are unnecessary in places. However, they are few and far between. I enjoyed the interaction between the characters and knowing that everything is about payback will make the anticipation of the next chapter even sharper. Can't wait! | Reviewed By: Snowfall [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2012 00:51 PST
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Those last couple of lines had me grinning like an idiot. I have to wonder what excuse Kagome is going to give him. Smiling sweetly, huh. That is scary. I do feel a little sorry for Inuyasha though. ^_^ I hope the deal with Sango pans out and that she doesn't put herself in danger. Love that Naraku and Ryuu...(can't spell his name)is on their side. They should be rather cunning. Hm, with a recording, there might not have to even go to court. That would be nice. ^_^ | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] |
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