| "Eyes in the Dark" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: King Baka [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2018 12:38 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Like I said, I somehow missed this story when it first came out.
Reading it now was a very nice surprise! Your decision to write
this in the first person as though both of them were telling a
story was spot on. Even if you hadn't specifically stated that
Kagome wasn't a slut, and that it wasn't rape, both of those
positions would have come through loud and clear. There was
obviously a connection established between them from the instant
Kagome noticed his 'eyes in the dark.' I imagine you were just
trying to be extra PC about it, otherwise some idiot might leave an
ignorant comment. I loved the slow buildup also. It was like she
was torturing me at the same time she was torturing Inuyasha
(obviously the good kind of torture). I figured she would invite
him over at some point, but I thought he was actually going to have
to run down to the street then up the stairs in her building
(setting a land speed record in the process). Your way was much
better. It fit the mood a lot better. Nice touch with the moonless
night, btw. That lent a more emotional aspect to this whole thing,
which probably had to happen before things became explicitly
sexual. Overall, I can definitely tell you had a lot of fun with
this. As did I.
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Reviewed By: dabrenz On: June 02, 2017 09:38 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really really enjoyed this story -- I love all of your works;
I've just been on a reading spree and completed about 30 of your
fics in a row; I needed a break so I just wanted to leave a review
to tell you that I really love your writing and I hope you stay in
the fandom and write whenever you have the time and inspiration to
do so :D
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Title: I stayed up pass my bedtime because of you lol
Reviewed By: ladytokyo [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2012 04:26 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG I swear you never cease to amaze me this was wow even I image what was going on. oh to be single and young once more lol. This was beyond sexy and I love inch of this story for sure. I love this story and I have to make sure to check my e-mails regular for sure to make sure I know that you have updated. |
Reviewed By: Shortsh1t [MediaMiner Member] On: February 29, 2012 18:48 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love your fanfictions this one is one of your best. |
Reviewed By: Dark_Lady_69 *nsi* On: February 29, 2012 12:31 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Omg... What can I say that hasn't already been said... Other then I think this oneshot needs a follow up maybe ^.^ |
Title: Burning Hot!
Reviewed By: Midnight Cat On: February 28, 2012 06:08 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Sometimes I don't know if the time is right, the influences are perfect, or if it is something else, but I can honestly say that this story had me so turned on that I had to take several brakes just to get my wits together! +*+*+* Original, sexy, tantalizing, and hot, are just few of the words that come to mind, and I can tell you that the raw desire that you describe was palpable! *+*+*+ Thank you, thank you, thank you, SO VERY MUCH for continuing to share your amazing talent with us! |
Reviewed By: inuamante81 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2012 18:11 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's stories like this that make you rock out loud. It's a very original story concept, that is well written and extremely smexy (smart and sexy). Keep doing what ur doing cuz ur doin a great job. |
Reviewed By: Anomalous On: February 27, 2012 16:39 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Steamy, creative, and very well written. I thoroughly enjoy reading your work as I love your style of writing and your originality! You transitioned between the two characters very effectively and you nailed the first person narrative. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future! |
Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2012 10:30 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOooh, girl, this rocks. You handled the first person voices excellently well, and what a scenario! I like your sassy, assertive Kagome, too. Very cool. |
Reviewed By: InuKaguFan On: February 27, 2012 07:13 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh WOW! I just love your work. That was amazing, You just made my night. I can't get it out of my system! That was brilliant, just like your other stories. Please write more, it is always a pleasure to read ;). |
Reviewed By: bluerose3514 On: February 27, 2012 05:59 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, this little gift just perked up my morning :). Great oneshot. And now I'm going to have thoughts of a streaking Inu for the rest of the day, thanks. Lol. |
Reviewed By: vvkimbo07 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2012 21:59 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! What a story! It was steamy and hot, but best of all, wholly unique! Great work! Loved every minute of it! |
