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| "Craigslist" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: Continue/Sequel
Reviewed By: Baby On: June 01, 2018 20:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story but cuts off at the end, needs to be continued or have
a sequel.
| Reviewed By: inqtrini On: October 02, 2014 15:17 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I always come back to this story when I'm in the mood for something
well-written. The plot was definitely smooth and it's not too long
which makes it an enjoyable read for one night. I absolutely love
the lemon as well. Definitely one of my favorites out of all the
fanfiction I've ever read. It was good to point out that Inuyasha
was a virgin during the sex. Believable sex is MUCH BETTER than
ridiculously (and impossibly) awesome sex all the time. It would
have been so weird if Inuyasha started out all commanding and
domineering right from the get-go. And I LOVE that he gets all
nervous and stuttery. It makes him even more real. And of course
Kagome is curious, but reserves judgment. Although they're in a
separate universe with separate roles and a different situation, I
feel that you've highlighted the characters incredibly close to how
they really are. Inuyasha's not some super-douche that disrespects
women (But a lot of fanfics seem to write him as such. Why?!) and
Kagome is naturally kind-hearted and welcoming. I commend you
greatly for this story! Especially since this is my 8th (9th?!)
read. Thanks so much for writing it!
| Reviewed By: knolee On: September 06, 2013 04:43 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been aimlessly looking for short stories/multi-chapter one shots to read, but nothing kept my attention...until I came across yours. I was hooked from the beginning til the end of the latest chapter. Everething from the concept to the well planned outline was spot on. Wouldn't have changed the story any other way. Characters didn't seem to be rushed now was the story cliche. Very original. And the lemon...oh my. You did such an awesome job, I may or may not have reread it. Lol. Looking forward to reading your last chapter!! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2013 22:24 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally got a chance to read these two new chapters, and I loved it! I'm so glad that Kagome wasn't seriously hurt - well, okay she would have died from the miasma, but I mean I'm glad she wasn't raped and too knifed up. Definitely glad she wasn't raped, and that she wasn't afraid of Inuyasha when she saw him because she knew the impostor wasn't him, even if she didn't know how she knew it. I thought you did a fabulous job with the lemon, and the entire story in its entirety. Looks like everything's all put together in a neat little package, and I agree that probably just one more chapter would do it, tie up all the loose ends like you said and put a lid on it and pack it away as completed. I'm looking forward to Inuyasha finally explaining everything. Shouldn't be too hard for Kagome to grasp and accept the concept of youkai and hanyou, given her collection of oddities about Inuyasha thus far. What would be a more logical explanation? I envision Kagome listening to everything and thinking that it actually makes the most sense. Still want to actually see it play by play, though, and then of course we've got the meeting with Mother, but that can go down more 'epilogue' in style and I'd be fine with that. Whatever you do, however you decide to throw it together, I'm definitely looking forward to the next - and I guess final - chapter. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2013 13:01 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very interesting concept! I love this kind of universe, where youkai and hanyou are still around but aren't too common. I was wondering if we were going to see it dawn on Kagome after he left that he'd called himself a hanyou during his rant. Then again, she might not even know what the word means, so it wouldn't matter. And when you cut to Naraku at the end I'd already felt that good sense of foreboding...if there's such a thing as a good sense of foreboding, LOL...that okay, he's going to be an active bad guy and this isn't just a cheesy romantic comedy, but I wasn't expecting him to teleport himself out of prison right then and there. How he got out is fine, chalk it up to youkai magic and leave it at that, but I wasn't expecting Kagome to be in danger that very same night. Not that it's a bad thing, if you're just planning on moving this story along fairly quickly instead of dragging it out and out (and out) and frankly, I get tired of stories that get all built up and fabulous and then they just fizzle out and the author never completes them. If you've got a more compact idea, and you're going bam, bam, bam with your plot and action and you're getting it done and it'll be a kick ass story from start to finish at only five or six chapters, I'd actually prefer that to a long-ass story that never gets itself to the point. So I say you're on the right track, and keep up the awesome work! |
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