| "Syndrome" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
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Reviewed By: manga, the Awesome One in pigtails [MediaMiner Member] On: September 04, 2002 09:41 CDT
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Well, some of the sentences were a little garbled I think. This one: "Phobias were such highly inconvenient things, he concluded, so it was no large surprise realizing he'd unconsciously formed one over the years." doesn't quite make sense. Why was it no surprise that he'd developed a phobia? What does that have to do with them being inconvenient? Anyway, other than it being too short, it's fine. Me want see more! :) |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2002 21:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter! Loved the author's note. Very...hmm author note-ish. Much luck on the senoir year, mine was great. Bulma has a bad feeling about tomorrow huh? That's not good. Authors never give characters bad feelings for no reason. Can't wait for the next update. Oh and by the way, I just caught that Veggie death scene as well and I thought the same thing with much more profanity and several tears.-JB |
Reviewed By: louie On: September 03, 2002 13:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
UPDATE ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This fic is ausome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...lol |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2002 10:47 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read a lot of the things you have posted here. You are one hilarious writer. I love the way you cut through all the cliches that other B/V writers (including myself) churn out on a regular basis. Anyway, keep writing...and I'll keep reading! |
Reviewed By: manga, the Awesome One in pigtails [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2002 20:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey. You mentioned preferring MM.org, so I'll review it here. This looks really great! My only complaint is that the chapters are too short! ;)
Honest opinion that can be completely ignored because it's not an actual criticism: Personally, I don't think Vegeta's life was that tortuous under Frieza. It certainly wasn't a cake walk, but I don't think Frieza did much more than condescendingly treat Vegeta like a favored pet. But like I said, that's just my opinion, and it doesn't affect the wonderfulness of your story. :) |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest On: September 01, 2002 14:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Vegeta. I'm scared of going under the knife too so I feel his pain. Even though I hate the idea of Veggie being tortured by Frieza I have to say that Vegeta's nightmares are always some of my favorite parts of fanfiction. You can really tell if an author is worth his/her salt if they can really make the reader feel the terror his feeling during them. I must say that you do it very nicely, indeed. Anyway enough of my babbler, keep updating and I'll keep reviewing.-JB |
Reviewed By: Chibi-Dacras babysitter [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2002 14:03 CDT
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Pink undies...really? How do you know? And that nightmare did seem a little disturbing...sigh...I almost feel bad for the little monster. O.O Oh my god...I can't believe I said that about my hero Veggie-chan. I bow down to him and grovel at his feet in hopes that he can forgive me. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: September 01, 2002 13:53 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Vegeta, having to be "under" to be opeated on is obviously having an affect on him. I wonder what cruel torture he underwent at the hands of Frieza. I love the reference to Short Circuit ^_^. Another great chap. Keep'em comin' :D. |
Reviewed By: louie On: September 01, 2002 12:28 CDT
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U Should UPDATE ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I love this fic!!!!!!!!!!!!! Continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Jadedbest [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2002 00:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't believe this doesn't have more reviews! The best works are always missed by the masses. I love the dialogue between V/B. It was so...well perfect. I can already tell this is going to be an excellent fic. Waiting for your next update.-JB |
Reviewed By: Susan On: August 30, 2002 11:43 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Veggie looks like he's gonna have to suffer a little longer. I like the verbal exchange between B/V and the way you worked a little humor with the messages on the answering machine. Good chap! |
Reviewed By: louie On: August 30, 2002 11:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good!!!!!!!!! I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! UPDATE ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Goat On: August 29, 2002 22:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's original so far so I like it. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: August 29, 2002 18:01 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I can already tell that this is gonna be one great fic. I like the way you used the medical terminology to describe Vegeta's condition. I can't wait to read more. Great job!! |
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