Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2006 19:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not to bad, but it could been a lot better. She wasn't only raped, but on her first time? By a mortal, from mortal drugs? I think it would been little more belivable.. if it had at least been a demon or jelous rival god. The weak story aside, the lemon content wasn't that great either. It was not very descriptive/graphic, or emotional. Perhaps I'm spoiled by reading stuff like the eva fic HomeBodies.. but I just can't enjoy mindless vague lemons anymore. Still you show promise, and if you do some "research" on other lemons you should be able to improve.
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