| "A Whisper in Darkness" Reviews/Comments [ 42 ] |
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Title: Lord of the black Flame
Reviewed By: Lord Canti On: November 16, 2003 19:06 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
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Title: Pure Enjoyment!!
Reviewed By: Neko-chan4 (my FF.Net penname) On: August 30, 2003 22:40 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooooh, this was one of the best lemons I've ever read! Really top-notch, and plenty steamy! I just loved it! You had a perfect blend of sadness and ecstasy here---you captured Meryl's emotions so perfectly! If you haven't already done a sequel, please, PLEEEEEASE do!! A happy, reunion-type one! But yes, this was definitely a sequel-worthy lemon. |
Reviewed By: Inu bullet [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2003 18:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sequal! Have them get married and have tulips or whatever the hell Vash the humanoid plant calls children. It is the most emotionally detailed fic that I have ever read. I geuss that's what you get from female authors, sorry, but we males for the most part focus on the physical aspects. and longest lemon scene, too.
BUT there was acouple of things that just totally messed certain sections up.
1. other men, as in, not virgin? not good. That was horrible. making Meryl expierienced makes Meryl, i'm sorry to say, a slut. It's a TV show that yall, myself, and probably all the other readers don't own. That's ruining the creators' babies. The insurance girls are Moral yet trigger happy (and theres nothing wrong with that) women. especially Milly. Making them screwy types just lowers people's views. If that offends you, you know how to reach me.
2.You were quite... grammatically fancy, and thats good, except you hit one bump in the road. You put the word "ass" in there. say "firm rear" or something else.
Two mistakes in 9 pages is unbelievably good. not many people can pull that off. talk about your acceptable casualties.
Sequal!
(notice all of the 'perfect 10' ratings. I just about never do that.) |
Reviewed By: lablacknikita On: August 02, 2003 13:59 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn good story! I don't mind OOC sometimes, but it's always nice to read something that actually fits the characters' personalities. Looking forward to any sequel. |
Reviewed By: CrazyAce On: July 26, 2003 10:50 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
VERY DAMN GOOD. VERY VERY VERY DAMN FINE!!
I just had a random thought. Can Vash have kids? If so, *snicker*snicker* can you imagine Meryl as a mom of Vash Jr.? There's a thought! (And quite possibly an idea for a sequel... *hint*hint*nudge*nudge*) |
Reviewed By: Lea_D [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2003 14:19 PDT
Comment/Review:
BEAUTIFUL!!!! Just beautiful! I like this! IT should just be a fic wiht a sequal or something... i almost wish i had a Vash of my own to be that sweet! *cries* I have to go before i fall to pieces thinking there are no men like Vash! Tall, cute, funny, and serious all in one! |
Reviewed By: Calinda On: July 21, 2003 00:51 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story please keep writing |
Reviewed By: Blade On: July 12, 2003 21:33 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it. Its so hard to find fics about Vash and Meryle and not Wolfwood and Vash. x.x Not that I hate the pairing, I just prefer more of Meryle and Vash. The shows just always hints at those two.
I do hope you do a sequel, I'll read it. Can I suggest an idea? Maybe have something happen to where everyone thinks Vash is dead, and then a couple year later he shows up, and finds Meryle. o.O She'd be furious and it make for a good plot. But, hey ^.^ You're the writers. Just an idea.
Again, though, great story. I loved the silence effect. The way you proposed Vash's soft character during the love making was different and unexpected. Most hentai's have the male taking charge and experience in the act. But, this was soft, sweet and beautiful. Great job. |
Reviewed By: Reviewer On: June 07, 2003 05:03 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, great fic, I just wanted to review this story in the hopes that u guys do make a sequel. I hope to read more from you. Bye. |
Reviewed By: adrianchaos [MediaMiner Member] On: May 25, 2003 03:02 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow in most of the other 'vash' fics i come across he's gay( and dont get me wrong i have absolutely no prob. with yoai), but i've been trying to find a good v/m fic and here it is.too bad you you didn't make it a chapter fic. anyhoo Sequal PLEASE!!! |
Reviewed By: Airen On: May 19, 2003 16:42 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Beautifully written! I agree wholeheartedly with Robofetus0; this is one of the best lemons I have ever read. I look forward to a sequel. ^__^ |
Reviewed By: Robofetus0 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2003 12:18 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was absolutely the sweetest, sexiest, most bestest het lemon I've ever come across. Your writing style is unmatched: detailed, but not clinical or too objective, with brilliant insight into the thoughts, feelings, and behavior of the characters. I loved every minute of it! I hope you do write a sequel. |
Reviewed By: kuko-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2003 12:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
^_^, *tears* Oh man, that was great! It's not one of those disgusting, PWP lemons I usually stumble across. It was a generally well-written fic that had more than just hentai. The last little bit was so sweet. Makes me really envious of Meryl. Anyhow, go and get that sequel out soon!! Later!
-Kuko-chan |
Reviewed By: amberwaves On: January 24, 2003 13:40 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful. I loved it. very touching. I'm definately ready for that sequal! |
Reviewed By: Gryphon Lady On: January 16, 2003 10:44 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Who in their right mind could give this collaboration less than a ten? Sickeningly sweet, it was just the kind of fic I was looking for. Moved me to tears. I hope to see just as sweet a sequel. |
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