Reviewed By: passionova On: November 15, 2002 17:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
You are right.My first gut instinct was to splutter in indignation and start complaining that this chapter finished there. And then I stopped. Why would I splutter and gasp..unless I REALLY enjoyed it? The characters came alive and you set the tone perfectly. I swear *I* shivered when he whispered "Bulma " :)
Please dont let your anxiety regarding lemon hinder the progress of this fic. You know, the slow sensual road to seduction can be far more captivating and enthralling than the inevitable act itself. Good luck. and may the inspiration hammer hit you hard enough on the head to allow you to continue this.. :) |
