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| "Chaos no Ageshio (Tides of Chaos)" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: J.R.Karsten [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2005 22:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm not sure you did this and didn't know it or you did it because you wanted to, but the whole seperation of lines in your story makes it impossible to read or undersatnd... it would be best to go back and re-do it so where i can understand it... it would be a great fan fic if you did that, knowing how you did your other fan fic. Until then, I'll respectfully not make a raiting on it.
| Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 18:09 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm not going to use the ratings for this, for a few reasons. Firstly, I'm not overly knowledgeable in Sailor Moon, so I won't even mess with that! Secondly, the formatting seems to have been an unfortunate issue, and I did have trouble with recognizing some paragraph breaks, and it did detract some from my being able to read and thoroughly immerse myself in your fic, which is unfortunate because it did seem as though this fic is thought out and interesting enough to engross a non-Sailor-Moon-fan, such as myself. You have an ambient writing style that I appreciate, and you obviously took care to make sure your work was as grammatically error free and mistake free as possible---the hallmark of a good writer! The only thing style-wise that did throw me was the abundant useage of Japanese terms that are not really all that main streamed. Arigato I understood. Much of the rest, I didn't. It does become a little nerving to not know exactly what was said, though you gave enough context to figure it out. Good, sound read, and I hope you can fix those upload glitches! Best, ~Sueric~
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