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| "Training Session" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: bura400 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2003 00:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Lemon Tina! Excellent. Dont listen those two flamers, down there. Sure there a are some things that need improvement but I can tell you work hard and I have read alot of B/V lemons and I have never read this exact storyline before.
AR: I see several insults, hon. Constructive Criticism and you did a little of that but riddled with insults. You don't even have the courage to leave your name. So as they say in England I believe. Bugger off.
i agree: Well yours is a classic flame, mispelled flame. So go away please.
Keep up the good work Tina and btw for would be flamers/flamers many of Tinas readers are mama's with kids not teenyboppers. I am 20 myself and know potential when I see it. (turns 21 in March) Bye bye Bura-chan | Reviewed By: christabel [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2002 20:49 CST
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I knew that Vegeta could do pushups and take care of Bulma, he is so talented. I loved it. | Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 On: December 14, 2002 08:37 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Well, I'm not going to comment on the idiocy left by Anonymous Reviewer, because the fact that it was left with the only intention of being hurtful goes without saying. I only hope that you DO NOT take his words to heart, Tina.
I thought the fic was precious. I've read many, MANY B/V's and I don't believe I've ever read any with this storyline, so yes, I'd say it's definitely original! And my husband would tell you that you have the hormonal mood swings that come with and after pregnancy exactly right! :o)
Now I'm off to read more of your fics!! I'm sure I'll enjoy them as much as I did this one!! Keep up the good work! | Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2002 18:40 CST
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Thank you, Anonymous, for bringing my Friday the 13th to such a fun close! I wish you would have left your name or at least a link to your fanfics so we could all see an example of what "good writing" should look like.
By the way, I checked all of Tina's other reviews because, as you alluded, she surely must have already received many flames for her "trash" based on this fic. Unfortunately, I only found one such review for any of her other fanfics, and the writing style is suspiciously similar to our friend "i agree" above.
However, I digress. This review is for Tina, not Anonymous.
Tina, I enjoyed this fic. Unfortunately, I'm not a teeny-bopper, and can relate to the fluctuating post-pregnancy hormones that Bulma was experiencing. I can laugh about it now, but I remember how easy it was to switch moods and God help whomever was within reach at the time!
I loved Vegeta's subtle way of telling Bulma that she wasn't fat - it didn't dawn on me that that was what he was doing until he actually said so. *Sigh* How sweet!
Well, I'm off to read more of your fanfics, because all those reviewers can't be wrong! 8-)
Meliza | Reviewed By: little_ninjin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2002 16:59 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know what? I should be ashamed because I have read all your fics and adore each of them. But those assholes who wrote those reviews of your fic caught me on a bad day. Let's just say I MORE than feeel your pain right now. And i respect the level of class you have, leaving those jackasses up there hoistedon their own petards.
Anonymous reviewers- i think that's another phrase for spineless cowards who can't defend their "points" in confrontation, and can't write weel, either.
If those jackasses- with their incredible"wit" and amazing "style" gave you poor marks- take it as a compliment!
Pearls before swine. That's what this is. They don't deserve to read your work. YOU ARE A TEN! | Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2002 16:29 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How can anyone take that second cretin seriously??? Has it ever been to school?? My six year old has a much better grasp of how to form a sentence than that. "sux" "Wit" instead of 'with'.."taht" , oh, very impressive..and 'I' as a first person indicator is a CAPITAL letter...wanker!
But on to the fic..I'm not a teenybopper either (but I suspect the first two may be!) I'm...over thirty..but enough of my troubles..This was well written and entertaining Tina, I thoroughly enjoyed it, and I'm speaking from long experience as a B/V lemon reader.....WELL DONE, and don't let a couple of jealous sad sacks discourage you. : D *gives Tina encouraging pat on the back* | Reviewed By: J On: December 11, 2002 23:12 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked this fic. Some people are just plain mean sometimes. I've read almost all of you fics posted here and I like your style. I'm new to fanfics but I kind of thought they where supposed to be for fun. I'm looking forward to your next fanfic. | Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2002 22:22 CST
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First of all, let me say that I really enjoyed this fic...as i have enjoyed all of your others. Please keep writing and posting...I love your stuff.
Now, a few comments to the first two reviewers. Let me say first of all, you are both cowards! How dare you write such horrible, hurtful things and then not even have the guts to leave your name? Second of all, Vegge's mate is 100% correct...there is NOTHING constructive about your critism. Pointless, useless flames from pointless useless reviewers. And by the way...I am NOT a teeny bopper...I am a 30 yr. old woman who had written quite a few fics. I know a flame when I see one. You should be ashamed of yourselfs!
Tina - I look forward to reading more of your wonderful, creative work! | Reviewed By: Susan On: December 11, 2002 05:43 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this, unlike a couple of people. Don't get discouraged by idiots who claim to give you constructive criticism, when in fact they're flaming you. I agree with Vegge's Mate 100%. Keep doing what you're doing. Alot of us are enjoying your fics, and to other potential flamers I say this: If you can't say anything nice, then don't say anything at all. | Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2002 00:22 CST
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"And don't consider this a flame; it's constructive criticism. If you don't know the difference, which you probably don't, then ask someone." -A/R
Why do people like to insult others? Do they honestly think that a writer would listen to them after reading something like this?
Anonymous reviewer may think that what he gave was constructive criticism but he is certainly fooling himself. To A/R: I do not care if you explain why you dislike a fic, your deliver is extremely hurtful! And it is a flame irregardless.
Tina, your fic is good. You do need to work on the presentation (I suppose grammar as well) because certain things do not seem to fit with the overall plot. I do not understand what Bulma is doing to lose weigh. I thought she was supposed to be working out. But it seems like she is just resting on top of Vegeta. So your plot is sort of confusing. And that takes away from the enjoyment.
Don’t be discouraged, though. You write well so do not give it up even if what anonymous reviewer had to say was spiteful. I could never dream of giving such a review. And you should not pay any attention to those types. They aren’t meant to help you out but only to belittle you.
Keep writing in spite of it all. I’d like to check out some more of your work, ok?
~ Vegge's Mate aka Eevee | Reviewed By: i agree On: December 10, 2002 20:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
yeah i agree wit him taht this fic sux so bad i couldnt even red past the first 2 sentences! u suk so bad just give it up and go away u moron! | Reviewed By: Anonymous Reviewer On: December 10, 2002 20:28 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of Writing: You really need to work on this. My advice is to get thee to the library, and check out a copy of The Elements of Style. Maybe then it won't sound like you're hacking up a dead horse from your throat.
Spelling & Grammar: The spelling was ok; I'm assuming you used spell check. But the grammar was just horrendous. There were several awkward or useless sentences. After taking my above advice, get yourself a beta reader to help you with your grammar. You really need one.
Originality/Creativity: You seem to think that your idea is original. Why? I've read B/V lemons up the wazoo. Including ones along similar lines to this. So don't fool yourself thinking that your ideas are original, because they're not. Maybe you should read a little more fanfiction before you continue writing it.
Enjoyment Factor: This was the highest rating, because I generally enjoy lemons. However, the sheer awfulness of the lemon scenes in this pointless piece of drivel made me cringe. All in all my enjoyment was about average; surprisingly enough, I've read worse.
Overall Rating: This was just a bad fic. I'm sorry if I hurt your sensitive little teeny-bopper ego, but this is the truth. I'd hate to discourage anyone from writing, but you are an exception. Unless you take my advice, get a beta reader and read up on some good writing, you will remain hopelessly lost. So unless you are willing to go the extra mile and improve yourself, please save us all the time and trouble of reading your trash.
And don't consider this a flame; it's constructive criticism. If you don't know the difference, which you probably don't, then ask someone. It will save you a lot of trouble in the long run, since I am sure you'll receive many of the former if you keep churning out below par fics such as this one. | Reviewed By: diva_eyez [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2002 21:19 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hehe, i tried writing a tiny lemon and it turned into a full blown 13 chapter story!!! lol, this was a cute one, i like!
well unlike the other two reviews, i really like this!! some people... >:| | Reviewed By: Legana On: December 14, 2002 16:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
girlie!!!!!! I got horny, cried , got horny again, and felt so weird, all because of your fic!!!
amazing how you did it, but this is the BEST one shot I have ever read, and I read a lot of fics...
well done, now if you excuse me I'm gonan take a (cold) shower!
great fic, really, amazing.
I really lost myself in the fic, oh and now worries about that Anonymous reviewer, it's just a jackass who think he knows better, but he's even too afraid to let you know his own name!
forget him ok? don;t worry about it.
you rule! I like your style, and so do others, so forget the stupid flames or 'construtive critism 'as he calls it. go and write your own way, that's always the best way.
kiss kiss, and don't get discouraged by those idiots, you're better than that. | Reviewed By: VampireGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2003 16:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What the fuck! I just read some of the other reviews some fucking idiots put and I was utterally disgusted! This fic kicks ass! Its one of my favorites! And on top of that those idiots couldn't even put their names! The nerve! cowards! they have no true pride! not like me! This is such a great fic that ends with leaving the readers feeling all giggly with the last sentence (lol what a way to do push ups)(i mean talk about kinky) And also I totally agree with the last reviewer the "anonymous reviewer" is obviously a male! so how would he know anything about pregnancy?! He doesn't have to push a living 2 pound thing out of a little hole!!What the fuck! Well I for one absolutly loved your fic. And I am going to keep coming back to this fic to see if anymore asshole flamers come to say anything and if they even DARE to I will personaly kick ther mother fucking asses! THE NERVE OF THEM!!ugh! great fic! you keep writing great stuff! and don't even pay attention to those low life flamers or as they put it "constructive critisism writers" fuck that! jerk offs absolute jerk offs!! | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] |
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