| "Till Death Do We Part" Reviews/Comments [ 27 ] |
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Reviewed By: Crest [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2004 23:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like your story its very interesting, but I only have one problem with it and thats your placement of the Japanese words Demo(but) and Gomen(Sorry). It really bugs me that you put Im before gomen...it just sounds very odd...like it makes the sentence seem wrong. When you use Nihon-jin in your sentence you need to make sure when you say it out loud that it doesn't sound like you were just throwing in random words...basically what Im saying is when you use Japanese words in your sentences make sure when you say the sentence out loud that it flows like a normal sentence...does that make any sense? Well anyways I like your story! ^_^
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Reviewed By: sailor chibi light On: January 02, 2004 18:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story please update asap!!!!!!
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Title: OMG!
Reviewed By: Oracle of the Stars On: January 02, 2004 01:37 CST
Comment/Review:
YOU UPDATED! YAY! PLEASE! PLEASE WRITE MORE SOON!
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Reviewed By: anime angel1 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2003 23:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it could you please make a sequel?
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Title: Till Death Do we part
Reviewed By: Km On: October 04, 2003 18:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue with you're story. I can't for the next ch. its very good. I want to find out what happens with Trunks! So keep it up and write more.
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Reviewed By: Sky_Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2003 05:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
you should finish this...it is very good so far |
Reviewed By: dork On: July 22, 2003 20:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
love your story please update soon |
Reviewed By: SereneAngel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2003 23:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Im sorry but the way you usegomen irks me. Gomen is to be used to say sorry thats true but you do not add I'm in front of it and you do not mix it into a sentence unless its at the beginning. It makes no sense and as i said irks me to no end but i love your story and bid you continue on soon. |
Reviewed By: Dark Cosmos [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2003 22:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great plot and it is energetic. I don't lie the fact that it seems rushed. You need more detail and fill in some of your plot holes. In the first chapter...the past one. I thought you made Trunks and Usa fall in love way to fast. It need to be more romancie. I mean it's bad when you don't put detail on how they fell in love. I thin Keikos is a bitch and need to rot in hell. Beryl is awesome and it is cool that you are making her good.
Serenity on the other hand is a bitch. I have a question. why does it seem that your chapters are way to short?
Momorou needs to die and you could have put so much more into this story. I know i am getting annoying but detail details detail. You need better descriptions and an editor. I would gladl.y be your editor so if you want email me at Saturnspyro@aol.com Anyways all together I really like your story I just thought to help out a little. Please do not be angry and think this is a flame. It is only Constructive critizism. I hope you update soon. |
Reviewed By: dork On: July 12, 2003 12:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Comment/Review:
please update i really like your story |
Reviewed By: Saris Yui On: June 16, 2003 15:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this story and I must agree with JasonC completly serenity needs to pay as does that b**** daugter of hers! I can't wait for uasgi and trunks to fight for the mating ritual heh heh heh *drop* anyways two thums way up can't wait for more!(but I will try)
JA'NE |
Reviewed By: Kan-lin On: February 17, 2003 14:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is great I hope that you write more and I can't wait to read the rest |
Reviewed By: christina [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2003 17:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story and want them to meet soon . Please update this story you are doing a great job ^_^. |
Reviewed By: ills [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2003 20:00 CST
Comment/Review:
love it |
Reviewed By: JasonC On: January 16, 2003 01:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well Queen Serenity is being a bitch again I see. What did she say to Keiko? Beryl should bitch slap some sense into her. She claims to want to get to know Usagi yet she conspires against her. Please have the showdown soon. I bet she wants to get Keiko, Luna, and Mamoru to prevent Usagi from moving out. She claims to want happiness for Usagi yet she is doing her all to prevent that so that Keiko can be happy. THe bitch needs to pay. Also did Pluto set Serenity up. She showed her all that would happen if she didn't kill Usagi in the SM yet she convieniently left out Beryls attack. I believe that Pluto and the Outers were plotting against Serenity and Keiko from theh start. If I am right I am also looking forward to that being pushed into the bitch queens face. |
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