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| "Works a B*tch" Reviews/Comments [ 23 ] | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] | Reviewed By: Sora and tai forever(to lazy to sign in) On: December 22, 2002 11:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Duo no tsuin.i think that one of the inuyash that he turns in to a human and he dose have black hair...what do waff mean i have no idea..
i like it ver good story keep it comeing! | Reviewed By: Mara-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2002 10:19 CST
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ooh, bravo bravo, very good. when's inuyasha gonna find out about the shikon no tama? (i'm guessing it's inside kagome?)
Mara | Reviewed By: sorena27 On: December 20, 2002 00:17 CST
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love the waff! it's so cute! More more more! ^_^
*~sorena27~* | Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2002 23:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Before you ask, overall, I did enjoy this chapter better than the first one. It was just so CUTE! He opened up to her (which some people may see as being OOC, but whatever) and told her his "secrets." *he he*
I'm guessing that it's not over yet. (yay, I like long stories!) Yeah, I know one conflict is resolved, but ... I KNOW there's more coming. Could be the HINT in the genres. (suspense!!;)
Uh ... excuse me for being ignorant of it, but ... what does "WAFF" stand for? I don't mean to be picky, I'm just wondering. (can you tell I do that a LOT:) | Reviewed By: Laura-chan On: December 18, 2002 13:44 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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I hope that you'll write a lemon, this seems a good ff ^^
Please, tell me this is an Inu/Kag, please, please, please!!!
I love this pairing *_*
ps.- forgive my not-so-bad-english (^____^), I'm italian ^*^ | Reviewed By: Sano On: December 18, 2002 10:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed this. Very nice story for a first timer. And I think Inuyasha and Kagome are always cute together. Can't wait to see gow you'll be handeling this. | Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: December 17, 2002 23:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I understand that this chapter may be edited/re-uploaded in the future, but I just wanted to tell you that I'm looking forward to what may come.
I just got into Inu-Yasha/Kagome fics recently and I'm pretty open to AU fics (mostly because I haven't seen the whole series, yet), so I'm interested in what's going to happen. :)
Tsk, tsk, tsk. Whatever shall I do with you?
*snickers* As for the lemon, don't rush/pressure yourself. Personally, I don't write lemons, so I don't expect all authors to as well. Since you're not sure about writing lemon yet, I'd suggest knocking the rating back to "R." (you can always change it later!:)
My only actual comment is that you said she grabbed a button-up shirt and a black "shirt." I know you meant skirt, but I'm just bringing that to your attention. ^_^
Questions that I have so far:
What are Inu-Yasha's and Kagome's jobs? why? well, if he's her boss or one of them is "in a positition to hire or fire" the other, then a workplace might not like that--no biggie, I'm just saying
I guess my MAJOR question is ... is Inu-Yasha going to be a human or a half-demon in this story??
(so far, most "modern" fics that I've read DO have Inu-Yasha still being a half-demon with the white hair) If he's human ... then will he have long black hair? Or would you write him as having the white hair anyway? *shrugs* It doesn't matter, really, I'm just curious because he's irresistable either way! ^_~
Happy writing!! ^_^ | Reviewed By: Mara-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2002 16:29 CST
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this is cool. some constructive criticism... wouldn't hurt to describe stuff a little more. like what people look like, and the settings people are in. Aside from that your story is great! I can't wait til you write more.
Mara | | Pages (2): [ « < 1 2 ] |
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