Reviewed By: cynical virgin On: March 18, 2003 18:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
NOTE: this is an actual REVIEW, don't expect that starry-eyed gimme-me-more sh*t, don't worry, I'm really not that critical...i hope -_-;;;
you have a lot of potential with your story ideas but I guess it takes awhile before the presentation of them catches up...I hope I'm not being to harsh here...maybe it's because I'm in college and expect more...?
some more things:
your characterization is pretty good. I say this because I don't believe that Kikyo would react like that. We've seen how she handles betrayal, and it's not curling up in a corner with a big bowl of cookie dough ice cream and crying her heart out (figurtively speaking of course) but Kagome and Inu Yasha were done well ^_^
dialogue: this is one of my major pet peeves...the scene where Kagome confronts Inu Yasha...actually the use of the term "genital", normally when you're dissing a man's member you won't use the more..."polite way" of saying it (but I'm Texan, so it might not be like that where you're from) Read a really bad lemon and you'll find all sorts of slang and derogatory terms for it
that's all, sorry for being such a nagging bitch
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