| "What a mess" Reviews/Comments [ 115 ] |
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Reviewed By: Laguna On: March 12, 2003 03:31 CST
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who gonna save Ran?
and who gonna save Aya?
muahahah... XD
this is getting interesting.
updated soon ok. |
Reviewed By: boowoman [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2003 09:10 CST
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OH MY GOD!!! I'm so sorry!!! Waaaaa ;_; I suck... and beg your pardon for this horrible mistake!!! *goes changing da chapter* told ya, English's not my first language ^^°.. about da other questions... someone else already asked me, why Youji wanted to marry, that badly... I thought about some possibilities and think, that he was really bored, wanted to make a big change in his lifestyle and/or wanted to get rid of the "misterious person" by marrying... about Mr. Takatori... I actually thought about writing a scene, where a servant tells him about what happened or Aya (the real one) crossing his path, but in the end I didn't, because I thought the readers might have figured out, how important that marriage was to him and that he'd know for sure, if anything's going wrong.. well, I'm sorry for my mistake and hope, I didn't insult nor confuse anyone ^^° ejejejeje... Thank you very much for telling me my mistakes; please tell me, if you see anything else! |
Reviewed By: Nirvana-chan On: March 10, 2003 11:16 CST
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I had a wonderful weekend with it.
It's so Sweet. I can't have enough of it.
Please up date soon.
I wish you could manege longer chapters.
reading this fiction is SOOOOOO fun |
Reviewed By: Sahel On: March 10, 2003 10:33 CST
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Nice fic. I enjoyed it a lot. esp.chap.14
that was so unexpected!
Hope you up date soon. |
Reviewed By: Hope On: March 10, 2003 04:47 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Saaaaa, that was great! I'm curious to see what will happen when Ran finds out that Yohji knows, and what's gonna happen to Aya-chan? o.o Can't wait for another installment!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Mara-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 22:25 CST
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hey all right, i think this is a great story, i just have a few comments and corrections i'd like to point out. first why exactly does this Lord Kudoh have to have an arranged marriage? second in the second chapter you say "„If a young girl like you is willing to give up his freedom, then it has to be in deep trouble... are the debts THAT high?“ the blonde wanted to know. " and got your pronouns mixed up in what Yohji said. third, how did Mr. Takatori find out about what Ran did?
beyond that, i just finished what you've written so far and wow it is so great! this is so awesome, if you don't update soon i'll cry...
(if you need a beta reader i'm your gal! onejoy1@pobox.com)
Mara |
Reviewed By: Sylph On: March 09, 2003 13:43 CST
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Ha. I knew he knows, but didn't expect him to be vengeful. Ran's gonna get it for trying to fool Youji. Fun, fun, fun. |
Reviewed By: babaca [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2003 21:52 CST
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Very cute chapter. I figured Yoji probably knew Ran wasn't a girl, but I wonder when he will let Ran know that he knows (and obviously doesn't care). Sneaky Yoji ... of course I don't know how much longer will he be able to fool Ran by seducing him into unconsciousness. |
Reviewed By: sakkai On: March 16, 2003 18:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
keep the story going its sooo good. what other stories did you make up? |
Reviewed By: MookieNH [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2003 04:46 CST
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Well I was hoping that Yohji was smart enough to figure it out! Kinda makes one wonder how long he's known.
The rose petal on the bed...nice touch. |
Reviewed By: Aisha_Max [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 21:52 CST
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That was great! Hehe! Youji knows, Youji knows, Youji knows...heheheh I loved it!!!! Things are really getting interesting now. I was sooo pleased when I saw that you had updated and even more when I read the chapter. Though the lemon scene wasn't as drawn out as I like them but it was still pretty good for a starter. I hope we see more lemons later on! ^_~ And I hope you update soon. I always look forward to reading a new addition to your story. |
Reviewed By: nakashi On: March 04, 2003 16:01 CST
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i have no clue why i'm writing another review but hey the story is great! |
Reviewed By: Nakashi On: March 04, 2003 15:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Nekocin [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2003 13:34 CST
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I still think you're torturing us with your cliffhangers -_-' the last few chapters were going soo fst that I'm quite hooked up what's going to happen next. Please keep writing ^-^ and who reveal this mysterious person soon... uh... are you pairing Schu with Aya-chan? He's getting jealous, right? PLEASE update soon!!! |
Reviewed By: Nickythetokyoboy On: March 02, 2003 00:29 CST
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WAH! I am definitely hooked on this fic! I absolutely adore it, so you need to write more soon!! |
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