| "Not Meant For Me" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2003 22:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ANOTHER GOOD EP |
Reviewed By: Ember [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2003 09:58 CST
Comment/Review:
This is very nice for a first time fic. I like the way you managed to regenerate Vegeta's tail, and there is very real tension between Bulma and himself, which is hard to achieve.
I would say the only thing you need to work on is you past and present tences. They swaped about a fair bit in places, stopping the flow of the story.
Otherwise I thoroughly enjoyed it! I look forward to reading more. Ember. |
Reviewed By: blackdeath On: January 18, 2003 09:22 CST
Comment/Review:
hi i love your fanfic not for me i just was woundering where you heard the song forsaken please e-mail me at salamander666@shaw.ca |
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