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Reviewed By: Tramp [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2003 13:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
NIIICE!!!! I like it. You need to expand the lemon scene a bit more though, it seemed a bit rushed to me. Keep up the good work. |
Reviewed By: Tramp [MediaMiner Member] On: January 23, 2003 13:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
So far so good. You need to work a bit on your spelling and grammer though. First off Keep your tenses consistant- I noticed at least one case where you jumped from past to present tense in the same sentence. Also, You used the wrong spelling for barren. The way you spelled it B-A-R-O-N is for the noble rank. B-A-R-R--E-N is how you spell it when you mean desolate. Other than that it's very well done so far. |
Reviewed By: smartiebutt On: January 23, 2003 02:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
O my God!!! that was sooooo gooood!!!
probably de best hiro/relena fic i've read so far!
Can't wait 'till nxt chapie!
Later |
Reviewed By: Cassie On: January 21, 2003 15:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow alot of lemons but it was good |
Reviewed By: Cassie On: January 21, 2003 15:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good |
Reviewed By: kthrto [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2003 15:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sara, this is really great. P.S. sorry i got on your screen name,,, mine was out of commission. Keep them chapters comin!! |
Reviewed By: Cassie On: January 20, 2003 14:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE MORE MORE NEED MORE :D ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Pammy On: January 20, 2003 14:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So are they (R+H) officially dating? And Relena in normal clothes is kind of funny. What's up with waving of the guns? Does everyone carry a gun in this series. LOL. |
Reviewed By: Cassie On: January 20, 2003 14:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is good now I'm going to read the third one now you got to write more! |
Reviewed By: Cassie On: January 20, 2003 14:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sara this was wounderfull I loved it now I'm going to read the rest of the fan fics that you have put out keep up the good work |
Reviewed By: ALL CAPS On: January 18, 2003 18:25 CST
Comment/Review:
MORE, MORE, MORE! NEED MORE TO SURVIVE. =D |
Reviewed By: Marianne Me. On: January 18, 2003 18:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hilarious and touching in parts! I'm defintely digging this fiction. Keep them chapters coming. |
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