| "When Dreams Come True" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2006 12:43 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is pretty good. You should finish this. I'm sorry, I'm bad at making up names.
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Reviewed By: Laredith On: January 16, 2005 18:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the story line of this fanfic, it just gets confusing because it's written in the present tense. For the next chapter maybe could you try past tense? Other then that, iI've found it quite entertaining. Good job! -Laredith
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Reviewed By: junostar On: October 16, 2003 17:42 CDT
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i think dementia would be a great name its so evil and fitting for some one who is that mix.and it kinda sounds like demen child and it soulds like thats what your carecter is de·men·tia Pronunciation: di-'men(t)-sh&, -shE-& Etymology: Latin, from dement-, demens mad, from de- + ment-, mens mind -- more at MIND 1 : a condition of deteriorated mentality often with emotional apathy 2 : MADNESS, INSANITY - de·men·tial /-sh&l/ adjective *juno*
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Title: Nickname
Reviewed By: Nynke On: October 16, 2003 13:55 CDT
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Hmm, something like Frieta (frieza, vegeta)or Vriegeta, Friega, Vegeza, Freta?? I'm not sure 'bout the last one, sounds more like a girlsname to me. Anyway, keep on writing!
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2003 22:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
woohoo put a new chaptewr out soon please
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2003 22:58 CDT
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i think the name should have maybe a little of cooler's name, freeia's adn vegeta's name in it
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2003 22:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
yeah you go girl another great chapter under your hat. CaN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS TO OUR HEROS next
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 15, 2003 22:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
yeah another great chapter
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: October 08, 2003 21:16 CDT
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hey when are you goin to post a new chapter, I would like to see what the wish is going to be for. Please update soon!!!!!
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 08:12 CDT
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thats some wishes
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 08:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
yeah a sex scene between our favorite bad boy prince adn his loud mouthed wench
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 08:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
yeah a bond that is cool
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 08:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
yeah the start of something good is coming
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 08:09 CDT
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hey he admits he is in love with her
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Reviewed By: bardocksbabygirl [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2003 08:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
love this story so far
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