| "The Hunters" Reviews/Comments [ 106 ] |
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Reviewed By: myst-ikal On: June 16, 2003 10:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
DO NOT EVEN THINK OF QUITTING THIS STORY!!!!! I look forward to reading your updates, and though this is my first time writing a review for it, I'm sure there are many people that love this story as much as I do.
Vote:
1# - I think that you should leave the couples as is and not add any more, unless you're going to make your chapters longer. I belive that if you add more couples/characters, then you're taking away story time from the couples you already have.
2# I'm not saying that I don't like Jou, because I do but NO, Jou should NOT have an item! He's a very strong quarter vampire and will make a very powerful full, why does he need a item? If he has one; from what you've written about him, he might be stronger than Yami! Especially if he's able to draw power from the item.
Maybe Shadi could have the rest and they have to play a Shadow Game or something to get them. Or have a couple of them buried in Yami's tomb or scattered all over the world and they could have a ton of adventures finding them. |
Reviewed By: Silvia Sci Fi On: June 16, 2003 09:39 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm loving your story but I'm not reviewing all the chapters because my english sucks.
I'm fine reading but not writing.
You'r doing a great job here, please don't stop. |
Reviewed By: Alexis On: June 16, 2003 04:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE IT!!! My friend, Shadow told me to read this and it's good and I'm glad to read it.
Vote 1: I wanna Otogi to be like Yami!!! And, Mokuba too since he's Seto's little brother but make him a half.
Vote 2: I think he should have one and I vote for that... what's it call? The key, is it? Oh well. That the item I want him to have. |
Reviewed By: Split Persona-The Ones and Onlies [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2003 04:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
JC: Heheheheeee......*Sweatdrops* There we no other votes.
Kathrine: See this is why I don't usually listen to her.
JC: If you didn't usually listen to me every blonde bushounen that we liked would have been tortured to death or shoved in our closet.
Kathrine: We don't have a closet...
JC: We do have clothes racks.
Kathrine: Like the hooks in meat lockers? I can hang 'em up on 'em? *Looks hopeful*
JC: 0.0 No... Okay... we really need to end this. Bye. |
Reviewed By: Split Persona-The Ones and Onlies [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2003 04:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
JC: MORE!! KEEP WRITING!!
Kathrine: We only really started to get into this story a few days ago 'cause they're are a lot of stories out there.
JC: Yeah and we're sick and since it's summer we have more time on our hands. And we definitely are in love! And I do mean LOVE!!!
Kathrine: This has everything we like in it. Vampires, Hunters, mix breeds, YAOI, citrus, and Jou nearly dying. ^_^
JC: The last one's just her. Now we hope you DO decide to keep going with this. Even if FFNet getting slow MMOrg still loves ya. ^_^
Kathrine: Okay so we have to do these votes. You could add in Otogi as a Hunter that is in love with Pegasus (blindly we might add^_~) and tries to please him by going after the Hunters' mates.
JC: As soon as we read the one chapter we immediately thought of Mai as Jou's grandmother. It seems so 'Mai' to throw someone in a river. Mokuba could somehow meet Serenity by sneaking to Japan to help his brother (Such a Mokuba thing to do^_~) and becomes friends, definitely causing a problem.
Kathrine: Only because Keith could be something like a not fully turned vampire (Like Jou's dad) that goes by Pegasus' will and attacks Jou's family while Mokuba is with Serenity. Think about, Jou's family is the only one that hasn't really been targeted.
JC: Well, that's actually in Japan anyway. Yes Jou should have an item, but I hate the Millennium Scales. It's so weak from what we've heard. Maybe you could give him the mellenium key? It kinda set off the way people usually see him as thick-headed.
Kathrine: Only 'cause he would have the key to get into a person's head.
JC: Well, we'll review again in a few 'cause we don't remember what the last vote was. *Sweatdrops* Could have something to do with the length of this review. *Sweatdrops again*
Kathrine: Be right back... |
Reviewed By: Rayne On: June 03, 2003 13:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the story that u did my sister told me about it so i had to read it mt self. It was great.... there is going to be more right? ^_~ I hope to be reading more if there is any. Agine Nice job! |
Reviewed By: Fallen Hikari On: June 03, 2003 11:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey---
one word.....fantastic!!!!
loved it and i can't wait to see what happens next. pwease update soon! *chibi eyes*
~Fallen Hikari~ ^__^ |
Reviewed By: ray On: June 02, 2003 18:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
i have nothing to say be, but you did a very go job on writing this story.i really enjoyed it. you sould write alot more to become a great writer |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2003 07:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
Karen: Yami and Yugi are great! Mutual teases. They are perfect for each other.
LD: Yugi must be really powerful if he can shadow Yami's mind undetected. That or Yami is completely destracted.
Karen: Heh, either or.
LD: Yay, yay yay! Good stuff. Add more soon! Pretty please! |
Reviewed By: Fallen Hikari [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2003 16:33 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey---
absolutely unbelievable! i love this fic.! i love all of the interaction you have between each of the pairings. i _have_ to read this Dark series that you talked about!!!
nice use of detail on their outfits! and two thumbs way up on the fluff/lemony limeness and the descriptions of how each of the characters were feeling.
i can't wait for more! please update soon and keep up the fantastic work.
~FallenHikari*~ ^__^ |
Reviewed By: Phoenix On: May 28, 2003 14:50 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Love this Fic!! Please Continue!! |
Reviewed By: Mononoke [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2003 11:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
*Drools* There had better be a LOT more detail of future *cough*actions*cough* Me like... lots....leather...boys.....*more drooling* |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2003 08:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
Karen: Oh my giddy aunt.
LD: That was HOT!
Karen: The leather, so much leather! Damn the Dark Magician! I wanted them to cut the clothes off!
LD: Hmmmm Yami and Jou are kinda kinky, doing that in the gym during a school dance.
Karen: It is not like anyone could see them.
LD: *pouting * spoil my fun why don't you.
Karen: Poor Marik. If Malik only knew...
LD: Update again soon! It just gets better and better. |
Reviewed By: Phoenix On: May 19, 2003 20:03 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are so cruel to leave us hanging like this!!
We Wanna see them to!!
Anyhoo, Fantastic Story!! Please Continue!! |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2003 20:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
Karen: Oh, I can't wait to see what the boys look like!
LD: I love the trick the guys played on the Hunters! Very funny!
Karen: Very good. I love it!
LD: Good luck on the finals!
Karen: Can't wait until you get back, so we can have the party!
LD: And all that goes with that of course! |
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