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Reviewed By: Somebody Else [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2005 21:01 CST
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I think I just submitted a review here that was meant to go to a different fic. ^^;; Sorry!
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Title: Wow. That sucked.
Reviewed By: Somebody Else [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2005 21:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is crazy, but I would not, by any stretch of the imagination, consider if funny. There are a lot of things wrong with this but I'll just go over the basics as dictated by the ratings. Style- First of all: dialogue. Your interactions with the characters felt really fake. I realize that flow is an objective thing, but this story is a really difficult read. That's probably why you're not getting many reviews. Also, I include characterization in style, and you had really horrible characterization. I usually let people get away with it when they're trying to be funny, but I get the impression you couldn't write them in character if you tried, so I'm going to rag on your about it. Let's know the rules before we break them. Spelling and Grammar- Get a beta. Or better yet, get a copy of The Elements of Style. It'll help the flow, too. Originality- No. Just... no. If you've ever READ fanfiction, you would know better. If you're going to use cliches you need to do them well (For a model of a well-done cliche, read the Harry Potter series.) Also, the potty humor is pathetic, and only that much because I'm being polite. I realize that it's used a lot in Teen Titans, so a little bit is fine, but you need to cut way back. Try making some grown-up jokes. Enjoyment Factor/Overall Rating: Sucky. Really sucky. I would reccommend a complete overhaul if not abandonment of this fic.
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Reviewed By: heeropeacecraft [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2004 19:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. What in imagination. This is an excellent story and very well written.
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Reviewed By: akuma_river [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2004 01:17 CST
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Wow confusing. So Naraku sent Kagome and Inu Yasha into the future were he had more control? But swtiched into Se and Ema's places. So what on earth is going on? Keep up the great work. coolsa.
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Reviewed By: oracle44 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2004 23:47 CST
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another great chapter.
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Reviewed By: chickenlover2_nli On: December 07, 2004 18:05 CST
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^-^ YEA! I am so happy! New chapters rock! Keep writing PLEASE! And wish me a happy b-day!^-^
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Reviewed By: tinkerbell [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2004 11:29 CDT
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Please finish this story, I thought it was really interesting. What did Naraku do to them, who is Indis, where are they? Don't leave me haning
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Reviewed By: Merai_star [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2003 16:47 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awsome story! I love it! how is he going to fight without his sword?! Its that glove isn't it!? It probly has some secret power! and I can't wait to find out if Kagome has any new powers! Hurry with the next chapter! I can't wait!
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Reviewed By: Lady Sesshoumaru [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2003 18:47 CST
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One day, Inuyasha will learn to listen to Kagome. I'm glad you're still updating this...my curiousity has continued to grow. I want to know what's about to happen to them *grins*
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Reviewed By: mandi-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2003 01:12 CST
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this is really good but, I'm so confused!!! What's going on?! Where are they?! I don't know! Ok, now that I'm back to normal, are you going to keep us hanging forever? I can't wait for an update! ~mandi evilyungone@yahoo
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Reviewed By: oracle44 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2003 19:23 CST
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I just found this story, please continue I was getting into it.
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Reviewed By: skne On: October 28, 2003 16:29 CST
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... ... osem. go you go.
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Reviewed By: Lady Sesshoumaru [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2003 19:24 CDT
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*glomps* An update! This is just so far out of the bounderies of what I would normally read, but I've enjoyed this from the start. I like not knowing what is going on *laughs* I like the fact that you are several chapters into this, and haven't explained nor given the characters the details about this life they are now living.
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Reviewed By: Morlana [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2003 18:38 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love the story really orig. Can you put me on your alert list? m0rlana@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: Merai_star [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2003 09:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story! Im so glad it was updated! Is Noi Miroku? I like the story line a lot! Ive never read a story like this but I have to admit its awsome! Keep up the good work!
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