| "Causing Chaos in the Dimensions." Reviews/Comments [ 66 ] |
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Reviewed By: Nesha (2 lazy 2 sign in) On: July 25, 2003 11:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well, just so you and everyone else should know, I DO plan to update "Grrrl Talk." I just have to do it whenever my computer feels like uploading one of my files on the Net. But, seriously, I AM working on the next TWO chapters of "Grrrl Talk" right now. I haven't forgotten. |
Reviewed By: Bejipan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2003 23:37 CDT
Comment/Review:
Yay, keep writing new chapters, but please, make what you write clearer. Below is a art of your latest chapter, ad it was a bit confusing:
“YOU STUPID FUCKING BASTARD!!!” Kurama winced in the background at the language. She was outraged at him for punching her into the wall. He could have at LEAST pushed her off him! He threw her off him and they both were locked in combat, dodging and throwing punches again.
It would have been easier to understand if you changed the begining of the 2nd sentence to Pan instead of she and the begining of the third sentence from he to Hiei.
No offence,
Bejipan |
Reviewed By: sol On: July 20, 2003 20:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update please |
Reviewed By: Nesha (2 lazy 2 sign in) On: July 16, 2003 09:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
That was funny. Real funny. |
Reviewed By: Inferno_66 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2003 00:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
Inferno: You know, if you need help I'd be more than happy to help you. Especially since your processor's down and all. . .
Flame: 'Help' is NOT what she means. She wants to read it and be happy it's over
Inferno: When was that a crime? Now get back inside your fic!!
Flame: *stalks off mumbling*
Inferno: Anyway! Please finish ASAP. Your doing a GREAT job!! By the way, a little hentai between Pan and Hiei might be VERY interesting.
*far off* Flame: you pervert!!!
Inferno: *flicks her off* So we all have our little secrets. Please, just finish. *runs off to kill Flame*
Flame: Uh oh. Finish for my sake. |
Reviewed By: Bejipan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2003 14:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
That, was SHORT! Short, short, SHORT! How dare you. Grrrrr... That was a really evil thing you did, puting out a new chapter and it is smaller than my shoe size. Feh, get writing!
Gomen nasai, but you need it,
Bejipan |
Reviewed By: petite_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2003 09:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh WOW! I wonder how Goku got in the YYH dimension! Oh well, I'll find out next chapter!
Great work, simply fabulous!
~Rock on, Peace out~ |
Reviewed By: petite_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2003 09:55 CDT
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Oh WOW! I wonder how Goku got in the YYH dimension! Oh well, I'll find out nezt chapter!
Great work, simply fabulous!
~Rock on, Peace out~ |
Reviewed By: Nesha [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 12:54 CDT
Comment/Review:
Okay... this site decided it did not want to post my review. Please update. And I was thinking about starting a Hiei/Pan romance club either on Yahoo or MSN.
If you would like to help me with it, please e-mail me at nesha219@hotmail.com |
Reviewed By: Maylar On: July 09, 2003 00:08 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Keep it comin'!! Your story Keeps getting better and better!! |
Reviewed By: katcat On: July 04, 2003 13:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! I love this new found couple! Please write more! I love you! |
Reviewed By: Nesha [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2003 10:21 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
A Pan and Hiei fic... YEAH!!!
I totally invented that couple, and I'm glad that someone else can see that Hiei/Pan are the PERFECT match!!! I mean, they just look so CUTE 2gether!!!
I'll be on the lookout for more updates, so please update soon.
Or I will PERSONALLY kick your ass!!! |
Reviewed By: Setsuna Saotome On: July 02, 2003 21:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Continue or I'll use the "Dark Dome Close" on you!
I love this fic, that is why you must continue NOWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Suna-chan |
Reviewed By: Bejipan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2003 21:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You didn't really have to stop writing, did you? Add more soon.
Bejipan
PS Watch out for the BOLD button. |
Reviewed By: Inferno_66 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2003 11:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What's wrong with you and every other author being all cliff hangy!? I mean, One can only take so much until fire and anger explodes in a fic with revenge! Geeze! I hope to GOD ur going to update this fic or else there will be major hell in store for you- one that will make Trunk's torture look like he got off easiy! Okay? ^_^ |
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