| "Inner Struggle" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
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Reviewed By: Hieislover1985 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2003 21:09 CST
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Awwwwww. SO cute. MOre please.
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Reviewed By: Kogas_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2003 14:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was great pleez keep writing!!!
~Kogas_lover |
Reviewed By: QueenOfGames On: July 11, 2003 02:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh honey you did NOT just have someone rape my Ryou! grrrrrr I swear if that was malik...... well i wont really do anythin cuz he's my bizill so yea... ::glomps Baku:: Give her her new toys ::Baku throws plushie:: PLUSHIES FOR ALL!!
The *Queen Of Games* |
Reviewed By: AngelicMouseGirl On: July 08, 2003 22:59 CDT
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Yay for Ryou! ^_~ This is very good. Please have more up very soon! Arigato! ^_^JAA! |
Reviewed By: Oakland Peanuts [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2003 19:01 CDT
Comment/Review:
What a change from the old Bakura! Write more! Light Kore! Blight - whoops, what am I saying? Write more! |
Reviewed By: ShadowsLight [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2003 19:08 CDT
Comment/Review:
I Demand an Update! Or I may start a riot! |
Reviewed By: Em On: June 21, 2003 08:22 CDT
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plz Plz PLZ update!!!! I've been waiting like what... four day now? This story is just awesome! I need to know what happens next!!! |
Reviewed By: ashley On: June 18, 2003 14:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
well ive been grounded but managed to sneek away on the computer....and yay a new chapter was waiting for me! it was a good chapter by the way...anyway you want ideas you got them {humphmmm}*clears throat*
1. whatever you do tyr not to rush the love between ryou and bakura alot of people tend to do this but forget how long and hard it is for bakura to love someone in the first place.
2.the situation although it already seems at a climax with the violence should get worse ...as bakura becomes enraged with his weak thoughts caused by ryous presence.maybe it should get to a point where ryou is almost killed by his yami or in frusturation with the new beatings he is recieving ryou will attempt another suicide...this time with consequences that land him in a hospital.
3. maybe in the next chapters you should try to ease in the thoughts and feelings of other characters [mainly yugi] by ryou going to school once again in another abused state [with cuts or bruises on his arms or something simular or worse] except that this time maybe by accident [yugi perferibly]will discover the tell tale signs of a beating and investigate further, maybe telling yami, who maybe confronts bakura who then maybe in reaction beats ryou who the goes to the hospital![ohhh! im on a roll!]
4. lastly maybe another idea is to have ryou in the after state of being raped and beaten and maybe famished goes to the only other person with a yami and thus with an understanding.... yugi! ryou trugging though the rain with torn clothes and such a heavy burden on his soul for feeling so weak helpless and dirty would make for a heartbreaking chapter...not to mention interesting at the innocent friend's response and the events that would follow!
....anyway hope my ideas will give you inspiration in continuing your story, update soon! they are just my ideas feel free to use them but you dont have to youre the boss! ja ne |
Reviewed By: Millenium Dark On: June 17, 2003 17:01 CDT
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I hope you countinue, but... yeah, it's kinda wierd. Having the Millenium Ring must suck, Bakura's such a jerk sometimes. I like my Millenium Crystal much better, 'sept Bakura wants it so I have to put up with him. I don't get to as bad as Ryou, but... not far off... |
Reviewed By: *QueenOfGames* On: June 15, 2003 18:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok I'm like sooo hooked on this now! lol the onlyt thing is there were a lot of like i danno funky things in your posting. I think it was like where quotations were s'posed to be, dontcha just hate it when sites funk it up like that? But anyways yea man this is awesome I love my Bakura! He's MY lil baka! muhaha! And Ryou man I sooo would looooooove to be in that room. Just a fly on the wall maybe.. heeeeeeee
grrr Anzu/Téa bugs lol
The *Queen Of Games* |
Reviewed By: petite_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2003 10:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG OMG OMG! I LUV THIS FIC! *grinz widely* Baku seems confused, I don't think he's used to luv...hmmm...Well, I just want to say that you are a wonderful fanfic author. You write simply fablulous! ^^ Don't ever stop writing, because you should make a career out of it! |
Reviewed By: Fallen Angel On: June 15, 2003 05:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
Ok. Very good. The best Ryou x Bakura fic I've read in along time.....most peopl I've read lately skip over the whole getting together part, and just have a mention or two of earlier abuse...... Please, please update. |
Reviewed By: ashley On: June 14, 2003 16:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please-please-please! PLEASE UPDATE! this story was good and i always liked the relationship between ryou and bakura and especially your evil angst filled one! *grins evilly* {im so evil}lol, anyway your story was really good so dont quit! no one like a quitter. keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: Elle-FaTe2x1 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2003 15:38 CDT
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That was really good and really really sad!! I can't wai tutil you updaet again!! I hope it's soon! |
Reviewed By: Em On: June 16, 2003 14:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found it to be a very interesting fic and besides it's so hard to find fics about our dear ryou
hope you will have the next chapter up soon... if there is one. |
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